Curious Cuisine (Superhero/Cooking/SliceOfLife WIP)

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#361

You had given her a brief rundown of what Ian had told you

Says her when I had a son


#362

Fixed. thanks
Now if you’ll excuse me, I need to introduce Chimerans…


#363

Mr. Chimeran this is Miss. Chimeran
Chimerans shake hands

That was fun, who else can we introduce?


#364

Oh shush XD
but yeah, currently pondering if I should go back and introduce Chimerans earlier or if I wing it (hah!)

Chimerans are Powered Individual with non-human features and appearances, ranging from animals, over machines to living shadows and plants

EDIT: have a spoiler:

But now you are here, the heart of Cornucopia rising before you.
Correction: Hearts.
Because right next to it a much more modern building-complex rises, a sign in the shape of a butterfly proclaiming the spiraling tower of glass and steel to be APORIA’s headquarters.
You pause a moment as you spy the girl in pastels enter The Agency together with someone her age sporting an impressive set of impala-horns and hooves, before you head up the stairs into CoCi’s City Hall.
“That…,” you begin as you step into the grand entrance hall, "is the kind of staircase Cinderella loses shoes on."
It could be.
The entrance hall is done in a light tawny marble, a giant staircase of black stone before you leading up to a landing from which various staircases lead further onto the long gallery on the upper floor.
You have the feeling to be rather standing inside a cathedral than a City Hall.
Sunlight shines in through various large windows, and the air is filled with the sound of people walking around on the dark stone floor.
It’s a great hotchpotch of faces, and not all are human.
Like the one of the woman behind the front desk.
Long, black-and-white striped hair that you suspect to be actual quills, if her porcupine-like face is anything to go by. Currently she’s painting her more human-like nails neon pink.
“Good morning,” she greets as you step up to the desk. “How can I help you?”
"Good morning. This might sound weird, but someone bought me a house in the city, but apparently withheld a couple of keys. I’ve been told to come here."
The receptionist nods curtly and looks at her computer. “Do you have a form of ID with you?”
“Oh, yes…” you hand over your ID (one of the positive aspects of moving to a new city will easily be getting a new one and hopefully a decent picture this time round) and the receptionist checks her files.


#365

Honestly I’d frequent such a cafe if only for the name.


#366

Yea I might just visit it at least once.


#367

It’d be a great conversation starter, you can even trick them into paying when their in their half-comatose state. ''Hey! Wanna go to ‘‘I Could Not Think of a Good Name So I Went With This Instead Which Was Probably Not the Best Idea I Ever Had To Be Honest As It Probably Won’t Make For a Very Good Sign Seeing As It Would Need To Be So Many Characters On It That It Would Be Really Difficult To Read It From Anywhere Other Than Really Close Up’’, your treat! ‘’


#368

I’m not going to lie I gave up trying to read the name after the first 8 words :sweat:


#369

Today on Why did no one tell me:
I just found there’s an actual actor named Iain Rattray. Whoops.
Should I change the name?


#370

You must’ve chose that name for a reason, right? Either having a fitting meaning or it being cool, I say you should keep it, unless theres some issue mentioning real life people or whatever. Unless, you find another adorkable name for our resident gibbering genius, to which is also fine and would most likely support.


#371

I will probably keep the name. Maybe make a reference somewhere along the lines.

On an unrelated note: Poor Francis looks down at text


#372

#373

Alrighty this is really something,
Quite good jokes, i never thought to find the Bielefeld joke, and before that hit shappens, this was hilarious, there is one minor mistake, when the mc asks marcus “is everything allright” it ends with a “.” instead of a “?” otherwise there is nothing else


#374

I cannot espresso how disappointed I am. You are not a great human bean and I shall show no mercy.


#375

You’ve cat to be kitten me, is that the best you could fish out?

Oh%20you%20crazy


#376

Quick heads up:
I decided to completely overhaul what I have so far.
Don’t worry, the story will stay what it is, but:

  • Rewrite a couple of rather railroad-y scenes.
  • Add in a name-check
  • Add in a Stat-glossary (no worries, this won’t go into the final wordcount)
  • Overhaul the visit to the café (more consitent banter, more random bits)
  • Overhaul the past relationships bit and making it clearer.
  • Reorganizing and clarifying some choices.
  • Overhauling some characters (Izzy took a bit of a 180° turn for example)

See you when it’s done.

EDIT:
I’d like to ask people for feedback here though. As I am going over everything we’ve seen so far, are there bits and pieces you think ought be be changed completely? Get fleshed out?


#377

I keep seeing random checks when I visit and explore the Cafe: Like RANDOM-Check: kitchen 0, living 0, bed 0, bath 0 or simply just 3:3.

Also, I suggest looking over the scene with your rival, it lacks… depth? And by depth, I mean a single parent’s wrath. For an adult screaming match I mean, take this all with a grain of salt, but:

  1. “They’re only stopping because you can’t shut up and hold still.”

I don’t think ‘‘Hold still’’ is the appropriate choice of words to use here, since he’s just nagging and being a complete prat. Maybe something ‘’…shut up and mind your own business!’’ ?

  1. "If it’s torturing you so, so much that you do not know every detail about a complete stranger’s business, Mister, then be glad I am having a good day.

I’m not sure if the MC’s trying to emphasize the second ‘‘so’’ or if it’s a typo.
Also, maybe it’s just a me thing, but there’s a lack of contractions in this one skit that kind of takes me out of the scene, since everything my character was semi-formal english. The lack of contraction makes it that when I read it, it alternates between aggressive, to passive-aggressive at a drop of a hat.

Those are my 2 cents for now, I’ll try to give more feedback nextime.


#378

As for the random check thing. That is more of a test-mechanic as i need to see that the results carry over proper to where they are needed. It will be removed once im certain it does.

The ‘hold still’ refered to haggerty berating the hairdresser working on them for having stopped to do so (because they won’t risk injuring them while they are flailing around)

But I get what you mean about the tone. I’ll see about that.


#379

Alright. Got the train and stationplaza scene overhauled and ran into a dilemma:
I’d like to make Sugarcoat a more reoccuring character, possible RO? but as she’s muslim I am worried of messing up majorly.
Opinion? Suggestions?


#380

The only suggestion I would make is to reach out to someone that is a Muslim that could help you explore romance with the character, making it… Well realistic, for a lack of a better term?