For the La mode Part? or for the choice?
La Mode - Ponytail
the choice is the one where you see see the ex alive with an hawai hemd in the TV, I chose my husband to be dead
Ahhh. Okay. Then I misreas things.
That hotel bit is intentionally unspectacular. But I am planning on elaborating on the MCs past a little there. Maybe have them go throw the photographs with the kid
As a filler to the past, what about a story about Aunt Gloria, about something she did to the MC even before the Incident^^. I got some Ideas I could send you, if you like^^
I feel like “vanishing spouse” might seem to some readers like it’s foreshadowing “mysteriously reappearing spouse”. Maybe. It feels like a plot hook, even if realistically, it usually isn’t.
Okay, as several things have come up: Voting time:
Should I add in a vanished option for the spouse, whether or not you had a good relationship or even were vanished (meaning: you know the other parent if the kid wasn’t planned/was artificially conceived, and they vanished)
Yes, add the option
No, leave it as is
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Looking at the option to break into the cafe on the first day, having to near identical sub scenes seems unnecessary (and the stats gain/loss is identical to ‘picking the lock’). So I’m toying with the idea of removing the option to get in through the ‘house’ part, and instead have the MC check on the ‘house’ door and the garden gate when they come to the part.
Remove the ‘backdoor’ option.
Keep the ‘backdoor’ option.
0voters
Thanks for voting.
EDIT:
3. In the scenario with only getting into the house through the cafe, should I still allow for a constant running back and forth between the cafe and the apartment (till the narrator snaps), or remove that (and most the banter?) Note: the interactions with the Narrator have already decreased drastically from before, so this bit feels a little out of place. The banter about your cooking skills would of course stay (as would the bit about superpowers or your outfit)
Alright, I’ll be honest people: I’d really like to remove the back and forth:
Every time I try to do something in that file, trying to smooth out the flow, fix something in the code, my mind just blanks over the back and forth aspect, and I hate that.
I’ll have the next update without the back and forth (well, sorta, you won’t be able to switch between cafe and apartment, but upstairs and downstairs), let’s see how it plays.