Anna_B
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For the ROs, you have two men and two women. But you also have Sol, who has a āfaux female body.ā This is just a suggestion, and there may be a reason for this, but I think it might be a good idea to make Sol gender flip able. At least for me, itās a little sad when a love interest you find interesting isnāt the gender you find attractive. I just think itād make things more even
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Xero0
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I reaaaaaaaaaaaaally like it, will be looking forward to it
I wanna ask:
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how will the weapons differ from eachother? other than the obvious long range/short range, do the claws actually allow you to make portals or not? do all short ranged weapons? etc
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how will the different ailements affect what you can do? I only really got the cold one yet, tho I like that it is your pressense and influence and such; Iām kinda hoping they all are things you can do, and either they change what you can do when you pick em (in which case Iād say just the hallucinations should count as an ailment, like idk better visions?), or they are all things you can unlock eventually (and once you master manage to turn on and off)
on that topic, when it comes to things Iād like to see added:
-more ailment options, not just those three
having black nails, teeth, and bones could be one!
perhaps electronic devices and other such intricate objects break down arround you much faster, as if an aura of erosion follows you, the sort of thing youād only be able to notice with time
perhaps animals and some supernatural beings are naturally scared of you, maybe even some regular people
perhaps you can hear the voices that spell or hint at what people are hiding from you, like intrusive thoughts but in truth is a hidden power you have
etc
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The idea for Sol was to make it a neutral character (androgynous? I guess?) but it shifted into something more like this because it was something I preferred more. If there is a larger want for having Sol being gender selectable/neutral Iāll look into it.
The next addition RO will be gender selectable, also hailing from the cosmos. But as for Sol, Iāll have to consider it if there is a lot more want for having that option.
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It is purely for the sake of preference, but there will be the obvious limitations of daggers not having the reach but big swords canāt mimic the same speed and maneuverability. The portal thing is just the Old Oneās power which is reality warping.
Ranged weapons, (You can only choose one) are just easy mode because why stab things when you can just shoot them?
Black Eyes = Transfix those that lock eyes with you (may that be fear, charm, or dread.)
Pale Skin = Hallucigenic pheromones that you can release which are invisible smell, taste, and sight wise
Cold Aura = It is basically as it says but just a lot stronger when used, slow movements, create an uncomfortable atmosphere, and such.
All three are an extension of what you could consider Eldritchās influence. Like how looking at Cthulhu makes you insane
I feel like that would just take away a lot from the setting and what the hallucinations establish.
I have planned to just have you keep what you have and not have more to have a sense of unique powers because it will still plague your human body.
Iād definitely be up to adding a couple more ailments, it just mostly depends on having something that is able to be seen, then having an interesting way to turn into a power. So feel free to drop ideas and I will see if I can do something with what you already listed
Thank you and I am glad you like the story so far 
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damn, this is an interesting story, I canāt wait for more!
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So something I thought when Xero0 had mentioned electronics is the bane Lasombra have in Vampire: the Masquerade. Their deal is that electronics donāt really work great with them, particularly with registering they exist; like, buttons are fine but touchscreens are very iffy, and the main thing I thought of, they show up as blurs or static when recorded (visually or auditory). Similarly in mirrors and reflections, too. Either way, something like that I thought would be cool. And, as a derivative power, like a form of invisibility could work. Like, not that you turn invisible outright but you can make people not register your existence. Just some thoughts, if you like any of it or if it gives ideas
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It is pretty interesting and I have already begun to add it to the game, it was just trying to work out some of the little kinks of it and your explanation really helps add more food for my thoughts. I appreciate the idea and it will be in the next update 
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Just a quick status update. Chapter three has been completely revamped and changed to something a bit more suitable for the theme and not so bland and basic. (With a hidden ability somewhere in the mix of it all.)
Sol will now be gender selectable. I am going through all of the chapters again to scan for errors and dear god it takes forever to do just that.
Also going to be changing the title to something a little more appropriate. I am still sticking with Corruptant as the base title with āEldritch Rebornā being the new subtitle replacing Shattered mind (your mind isnāt really shattered for very long, in any case, yours is pretty much the strongest)
Feel free to share your opinion on my 5-minute title that I thought about as I went to bed.
OH and more importantly. Two new ailments!
And even more news for Redmark is that most of the errors should be gone!
I hope to get the entire revamped and edited demo released by the end of the weekend.
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Aw thanx! Sorry, Iām late.
As for the title? Honestly, I like the old one better. Corruptant-shattered Mind.
Eldritch is very spoilery for starter, and a mouthful when you try to say it. Of course, it could also spell that the game is only about eldritch which can be good or bad, depend on who like or dislike those lol it can either be āCool!ā or āBoooringā.
For Shattered Mind? I never assumed it mean your character mind is shattered. But the world where we went? Would shatter your mind. Those horrors we fights? Have their mind gone and shattered and are like husksā¦
That the power we are going against (Under the eye), will shatter your mind, will shatter the consciousness of the galaxy as it expands, an eye that sees all and shatters thought with a blink. Itās terrifying. Even Sauron in lord of the ring couldnāt do that much, that peeping Tom! 
Anyway, as usual, this is just my opinion. Take it with some salt! 
P.S: However, if you wanna keep āEldritch Rebornā, I do have a suggestion for āEldritch Riseā. Why? Because there is more than 1. So it leaves it vague, which is rising. How many? and why?
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YO!
I am pooped. I didnt really expect it to take that long to change every individual thing to make Sol gender selectable - then I didnāt account for how I coded the first few chapters and it made my eyes bleed so I had to start over with most of the coding.
I did add the two new ailments. Chapter 3 has been rewritten completely (Mostly) and should fit the scene and idea a lot more.
Also, Chapter 7 has been partly released, like a tenth of it. A little sneak peak - which means nothing is edited and completely raw mainly just to let you all see what comes next, and a little bit about the new character stepping.
I am going to take a break, cause damn that took forever. I will have the latest bio update for the character up and ready by the time the next chapter is released. Havenāt changed the title either becauseā¦ I donāt really have a reason. Still deciding on that one, will probably stick.
A LOT of the errors and misspelling has been fixed, there is probably more hidden somewhere. Iāll save that for another peek at a later time.
Edit 2 ---->
I have got my head on sideways, a lot of dialogue and inner monologue has been spruced up to make it feel natural, and when you romance Zhurumhanā¦ all the points actually go towards him now! Yay!
Chapter 7 doesnāt have any stat changes, its just a teaser and will most likely change.
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Just finished playing the demo. And I absolutely loved it 
. Especially considering we got hentaied by tentacles in the shower in the beginning did not see that coming, lmao. Anyways the writing is engaging and enjoyable but did notice a few grammar errors (Iāll have to go back and look for those) and otherwise it was good. But I do have one complaint or worry; is it perhaps possible to add 2 or 3 more save slots? If not tis okay. Looking forward to the next update eagerly 
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Glad you liked it! And I can bump up the save slots no problem
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Unless I goofed up, there should be nine slots now
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Neat concept and i look forward to seeing how your story unfolds.Did not see any spelling errors which is always nice to see in a WiP but i did spot a few grammar mistakes and odd word choices, nothing experience ruining and im sure youāll fix them eventually but still worth pointing out especially since first impressions are important and some of them were pretty early on.
examples :
āNor do I have the emotion to express the guilt of cursing you with such a fate.ā
Not technically wrong but āforā would probably work better.
āA blow out the air out of my lungs as a moan escapes my lips.ā
āAā should probably be a āIā and the extra āoutā seems unnecessary. Replacing it with āinā would read better imo so it becomes " I blow out the air in my lungs as a moan escapes my lips."
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Thanks! I will look for those, the moment I can
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you said that you are making a poly relationship are you able to tell who the characters are going to be thatās in this relationship? id like to know
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