Already following this fic! And I love this 
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I like what I have read so far and enjoyed reading, now the but:
Selected female for gender, but others refer to my character as he/him.(canāt take a screenshot as on a mobile)
Chose the cold aura but characters are reacting as if I had the pale skin and dark veins.
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Will look into it, thanks
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I second that, lot of āheā instead of sheā¦
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Pretty sure I am either a idiot when I coded or just lazy
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I would say neither, considering you are āCodingā. Take it from someone who rather throws herself in the Styx than code! 
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I am back! This one admittedly took long for exactly no reason other than myself procrastinating.
So here you are, Chapter 4. A little peek into the worlds of the characters around you, introducing a few more characters that will warp the way ahead and mostly a little bit more world-building.
I am going to ask, I think I got most of the female being talked to as a male issues - if I havenāt please write down the sentence if you can so that I can have an easier time finding it amidst everything.
Next chapter we are going to go over the consequences of making choices and a good look at your powers throughout the story. This chapter does play out majorly in other charactersā perspectives seeing as you are dead, so just a bit of forewarning. Scenes in characterās perspectives are all dependent on how your relationship and friendship stats are, you will not be making choices for them.
Feel free to leave some criticisms, and as always, I really hope you enjoy the next chapter 
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Gimme! NOW!
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overall, it is good
more writers need to know the difference between āitsā and āitāsā.
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omg, itās heating up!!! and itās so gooood! and you end it so quicklyā¦ 
Too good, Too soon. Boo!
Btw, what do those choices (eyes, coldā¦veine) do ? like decide your powers or something??
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Other than interactions with new people? I guess we will have to see
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sure, keep your secrets! Just make me wanna take a peek! So mean 
Btw, Hayden is a Vampire right? How come she can breath? Since when Vampires breath?
Oh and another thing, there is one flirt (when you say 'Do you see that? Iām the only one who see that? then Hover Hover)ā¦I canāt tell who is flirting like my mc but with whom?
Also, there is a lot of He instead of She. My mc is female
Like here: I shake my head as then look back at Ensley hovering over his corpse,
Also the way you write is just 
And I mean the new update, man I love it. Btw, dunno if you ever played this game but if you didnāt, I recommend it. (Planescape Torment). Cause your game has that something, similar to Planescape Torment. I canāt describe it, but itās like when you found this amazing world then you step in itās reflection and itās even more amazing, more wonderful, and filled with so much and so many things that leave you wanting more and itās scary, and dangerous, and you may lose your sanity and soul and much moreā¦yet you wish you could never leave because itās so endless and has so much yet to show you and make you experience no matter the cost. (thatās how I felt when I played Planescape Torment.) and thatās how your story make me feel.
So yeah, keeping my eyes on this one.
Also, just a though but Sol has only a soul left in her faux body right? So, she could attach herself to the mc and gain some of her strength back? or something lol
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Hayden isnāt āPureā which makes her half-vampire but regardless of that I am letting my Vampires breathe a little.
Pretty sure it is Eris speaking.
Yeah I have been trying to get rid of those for a while but itās hard going through all those words. Is it in the recent chapter? Or are there still ones before the new one. I am a tad bit lazy but I will go through it again
I am happy to hear my story has that effect on someone, I look forward to producing the best I can
It doesnāt work quite like that seeing as she needs to take the power for herself for that to happen, so even if you attempt to give her some power it would be like a leech.
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Itās in the new chapterā¦mostly. hey, Iām lazier than you lol
Update again, and I look next time for you!
So are Smoochiesā¦ 
Your point? Dying? We already did that 
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Canāt argue with that logic lmao
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Hello ! I finished the demo and- well- I really want to know what will happen next !
How things are going ? ^^
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Glad it is interesting - kinda just vibing atm and going good for myself. And for the story it is getting along quite fine
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Just finished the demo. Liked it overall, but it felt a bit abrupt/rushed.
As in: MC wakes up has a hallucination, gets kidnapped and goes to another dimension.
Maybe include a ānormalā day of MC life in the prologue. That would also help to flesh out the world. Also maybe add some spacer events between main plot.
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I guess I can understand it but the intent was to express the urgency of the situation - for me, it isnāt abrupt but more in a sense of everyone is pressed for time. The prelude arc is written to get to it as quickly as possible to enforce the feeling that they are desperate.
I wonāt be focused on the main plot throughout the story and there will definitely be time to explore the world, meet legends, and interact with everything supernatural within the world. I feel like adding anything more, in the beginning, would kind of stunt that idea of putting forward a sense of urgency.
I am grateful for the input still
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Just a little status update, just finished writing the next chapter and will start coding it somewhere tomorrow. I will admit it did take longer than it had to, but anyway. Iāll see you all soon
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