ah, so thats why the progression is so fast, now i understand.
Progression? On what?
If the story is fast paced then my reasoning is this. An Eldritch Invasion, everyone is desperate to get something done and dying is pretty high on the list of things that shouldnāt happen. So why wait around for that to happen? I am making it feel rushed and urgent because that is exactly what it is, I want to give off that feeling.
If the Romance progression is fast. I donāt think so, it fits the scenario because everyone is going into this with the idea that they can die at any given moment. Plus, there are only two characters that got an early lock-in prompt so far and I believe each makes sense for the character.
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Dying aye?
Spoilers being: Muahaha now listen here pup, only I love you!
Mc: Donāt know you, donāt wanna!
Spoilers being: Donāt be like that! here, let me show you how to unlock your poweh!
Mc: Ewwā¦now I feel like Harry Potter!
Spoilers being: heh, now you are more badass! Remember: Luke, Iām your father!
Mc: Ewwwā¦you never paid child support you ass!
Spoilers being: Heh come with the territory kid, youāll get over it!
Mc: I still want that pony!
Spoilers being: Teehee just remember: Tik Tok! Tik Tok!
Mc: I hate Tik Tok! The videos are too short!
Spoilers Being: Roll eyes No idiot! I mean Tik Tok Timeās ticking! Soon hell will come knocking heh heh!
Mc:ā¦boooring!
Laterā¦
Mc: 
come on Sol! We gotta before Hell will be upon us!
Sol: 
Not in this life time!
Mc: Whine But timeās running out! We gotta Smooche before we go jump in that Horror Movie place! 
Sol: Disgusted Noise
Mc: My Lips are ready for your fangs!
Hayden: Rightā¦how about rain check?
Mc: Oh come on! Only you can warm them up, my aura-air-conditioner is on full blast!
Hayden: Sorry, rain check? I got to watch the final Episode of Game of Throne! See you later!
Mc: pout Damnit!
Mc: How about a Wig?
Eiris: A wig?
Mc: Yeah, if you put a wig on that butthurt Wolfie guy, I betcha he could be mistaken for Luna!
Eiris: you canāt be seriousā¦
Mc: Sure Iām ! Then you will be free and we will have all the time we want to Smooche!
Eiris: If only it was that simple, for oneā¦Luna isnāt just any werewolf, she is so much moreā¦a symbol, an icon-ā¦
Mc: A smooche Giver! Now letās K.I.S.S!
Eiris: Sighā¦really? Donāt you think about anything else?
Mc: Sure doā¦Kissing, Bouche-a-bouche, CPR-Smoochingā¦lotta of things!
Eiris: Those are all the same thingā¦
Mc: But still many things right?
Eiris: 
The next dayā¦
Spoilers being: Tik Tok! Oh waitā¦Knock Knock! Its TIME! HELL IS CALLING!
Mc:ā¦
Spoilers being: Oh donāt be like that kid! I told you, didnāt I? Soon, and here we are! Time to buckle up and face the Invasion of a lifetime!
Mc: Not fair!
Spoilers being: Grin heh heh good! That butthurt is sweeter than anything else!
Mc: I didnāt get my Smooche! So post pone this shit!
Spoilers being: Haha canāt do! It is happening either you like it or not!
Mc: Oh yeah? Iāll show you! Start Smooching the abominations as they swarm through the portal
Spoilers being: 
hey now! Thatās cheatingā¦you canāt do that! You are supposed to Tremble! FEAR THEM! NOT SMOOCHE THEM!
Mc: You are not the boss of me! I can do whatever I want!
Spoilers being: Damnit! it wasnāt supposed to go like this! FINE! YOU WIN THIS TIME! But Iāll be back with more-ā¦
Mc: yeah yeahā¦go away!
Spoilers being: Grrrrr damn you brat! Come my minions!
Mc: Oh no! Iām keeping them!
Spoilers being: Ewwwā¦no way! Thats ratedā¦I donāt wanna even think about it!
Mc: 
You snooze, you lose!
Spoilers Being: Grrrrrrrrrrrrr YOU SHALL PAY ONE DAY! Iāll BE BACK WITH MORE HORRORS THAT WILL MAKE YOU SCREAM IN TERROR!
Mc: Busy Smooching Monsters
Eiris: What in Luna name are you doing?
Hayden: oh Grossā¦is she smoochingā¦Urghā¦Gag 
Sol:ā¦how do you mortal say it again? How do I unsee this? Pluck eyes outā¦damn, I can still hear the kissing soundā¦
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I donāt understand what happened but that made me laugh XD
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coming back to that lmao
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My mc wield the greatest and most terrifying powers of them all: Smooching!
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Status update on my end.
My windows got Corruptedā¦hehā¦ get it?
Anyway, thank god for cloud storage because I just lost a little bit of progress but not too much. By that I mean all of my editing work is gone and I just need to start over which is FUN. So I am probably going to hop back to it next week because I am pretty annoyed right now.
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An entity from a realm beyond yours that is out for vengeance after being imprisoned on what may be compared to a little speck of dust amid the expanse of the cosmos. I was inspired to get a tattoo from Military Temporary Tattoos | First Responder Tattoos | WannaBeInk.com because Sol, who has been torn from its shape, wanders the Earth in a fake feminine body. a face with smooth black hair and lovely features. A simple beauty that conceals a terrifying reality. Given its history, Sol poses a threat, and earning someoneās confidence is challenging. Sol is unconcerned about this, though, as they are only necessary and completely coincide with his objectives.
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Yo! Small update from my end.
My country is experiencing loadshedding daily. My power is off daily for 8-12 hours making it impossible for me to pretty much get anything done and it has been like this for a while. Sorry but I have no estimate on the next update but I am working on it when I can.
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You South African 
Eskom?
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Hey, no rush take as much time as needed.
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Yeah
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Me too lol 
So no worries take thy time. 
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There are a lot of typos and unusual sentence structures. Will you personally revise them or would alpha testers do that instead?
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I am personally revising it.
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Oi there @ThousandLostSouls, grammer errors and typos asideā¦ I noticed few problems when I code dived, in stats page under āabilities and weaponsā tab the code for ailment ability are weird cause for eyes you used āBlack Eyesā instead of eyes and also there shouldnāt be Upper Case for Cold and Pale too.
Also arenāt there gonna be any ability stats for bones, scales?
I do recall saying that the stats screen is a mess and needs to be worked on and that I plan on working on it for the next update around. I am right now busy with pretty much an overhaul of the code seeing as I learned more things as well.
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Officially decided that I am going to go through and re-write most of the story to add in different elements and change things that I am currently unhappy with.
So I am going to take the time to ask you guys if there is anything specific you want me to focus on (apart from grammar) story-wise, weapon-wise, character-wise, the freedom within the game, and just relationship-building.
My main issue with the characters so far is mainly Tarragon and Zhurumhan. I might just change them entirely or remove them to replace them with something else.
I will figure that out as I go about it.
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I feel their are a little too many characters introduced up front, which can make it a little confusing. I think the two characters you mentioned could be introduced after our first foray into the alternate realm.
It would also be nice if their was a little more to our characters ānormalā life before being thrust into action. Perhaps also some more time to grapple on the whole being Eldritch thing, some more time for our character to come to terms with and figure out who they are, perhaps with more discussions with Sol on us being an Eldritch being.
Otherwise I love the story as is and wouldnāt be to keen on any major changes.
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The storyās general pace and flow will be altered a bit. The entire prologue will be a lot longer than before, and how you meet the main cast will be changed quite a bit as well. The world has also gone through a few changes to make sense of a few things.
Sol is unchanged.
Rin is going to feature in chapter 1 rather chapter 7
Eris and Hayden are unchanged.
Tarragon has gone through a bit of tuning.
Zhurumhan has been moved to a different plot and wonāt be romanceable. (Someone else will take his place)
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