I think the begging Archetype selection should be removed, i think you should be able to pick your combo.
@HornHeadFan Awesome! Big time thanks to both of you! But the dollar’s gonna… have to wait a while. Being a jobless 21-year old with working class parents and two siblings with both class and hobbies whose classes at a community college start soon… Yeah, I literally count myself lucky to have enough money to buy a Snickers from a vending machine.
That aside, the game’s pretty great. You’ve done a fantastic job of making the cast of characters all realistic and believable, and no two characters have the same “feel” to them. Even the characters I dislike I only do so because of a clash of personality, not because I think they’re bad characters, and that’s hard to pull off. I actually have my own "image of what the characters look like: Stunner is the high school Adonis, young, handsome and ripped. Tress is the cheerleader/prom queen, somewhere between a model and an athlete. Mob is wiry but muscular, good-looking but a bit shy, probably has a rather gawky, slouched posture. Origami is the slender cute one, with kind of a “nice girl next door” appeal. Combat Wombat is big and friendly-looking, but a bit awkward and shuffling because he’s not used to his size yet, like that kid who has a big growth spurt all at once and is all elbows and knees for a few months. Dirty Girl is definitely the “cute punk girl;” I also see her as the curviest one, maybe with a bit of extra weight (real people don’t all look like pin-ups, after all). Crook I kind of envision as handsome in more of a 1930’s or 1940’s way; a stockier and more barrel-chested build than we like in men today, with a very “chiseled” look to him, with just the beginnings of age starting to show in some pronounced lines on his face. Stoic, of course, is small, dark and quiet, the kind of girl you’d think was really cute if she’d just smile a bit more. And Uni is the pretty blonde southern belle, but with a more toned, athletic body than you’d expect thanks to all the swimming.
You are joking about the 10,000 I understand for the shipping and cost production but the actual app itself should only be about 4.99 or less depending on the size and with art it be a little bit more
Lol yes @StarWarsMaster I’m joking. Final price is up in the air depending on final length, whether any interior art is included, and other factors. I doubt the powers that be would let me charge $4.99 as only Tin Star is in that price range and its a million words or so.
Lol what are you saying HornHeadFan? Of course it’ll be $10,000. It’ll come with a solid gold autographed paper weight. XD and it’ll have 3 billion words
It will come as a golden Iphone with the app and it will be delivered in a golden hummer wit a golden shirt and a golden walktrough manual!
Don’t forget the golden spaceship!
And the golden wine to accompany such a delightful story.
And the obligatory “I Am Rich” app. (Look it up)
Can’t wait keep it up!!!
Can u give us a idea of what the new material with origami will be?
@StarWarsMaster, I hope to post an update by Sunday night, depending on how productive my weekend turns out to be. All the characters get new scenes so hopefully there is something there for everyone. I won’t ruin it with spoilers.
Also, I hope to speak with a prospective art team tomorrow night!
@HornHeadFan Ack! I am travelling by then! I hope to reach the beloved update soon 
@quan499, thanks for the supportive words and for giving CCH props on the “favorite WiP” thread! I’ll mail you a dollar next week. :>
@lisaburlew, I hope you enjoy him because you and the few other folks who protested changed my mind!
@stsword, I’m not sure I can work it into the game but it is certainly awesome. We had a chess club in high school but let’s just say there wasn’t much overlap with that club and the athletic teams, so my hat’s off to folks who hone both mind and body! I need to work on my body some. *runs off to do a push up*
@Leingod, okay I just added grey as a color scheme. Mail me a dollar so I can send it to quan499. Or better yet, just mail it directly to quan499 so I can avoid postage.
@Deathwriter, thank you for the high praise! It makes me very happy that you see how much I have obsessed and thought about how these characters would interact. I have thought about them entirely too much since February! Oh and I like Dirty Girl too. She’s my second favorite to write.
@Saracenar, I fixed about 95% of what you pointed out. The other 5% is, I think, just a slight different between English in our respective countries. I live in the southern/midwestern part of the U.S. and so I find myself using a few common phrases and casual language. For example, Crook says it was “cake,” just meaning it was easy. Many people here say that instead of “piece of cake.”
I greatly appreciate all the little spacing and punctuation errors you found. I feel like the first four chapters are pretty tight now, grammar and typo-wise.
Okay I’m hammering away tonight fixing typos and maybe addressing a little of the dialogue before I copy this file back to my offline folder and start adding more content.
You wrote, “Ack, I really don’t like the dialogue options when Dirty Girl asks us out.
My character didn’t see hanging out with her as a mistake, but isn’t interested in dating her either. My character just saw it as having a good time with a friend, like the option to have dinner dates with Origami as a friend.”
You should have only gotten the “It was a mistake” option in Chapter 4 if you heated things up with Dirty Girl in Chapter 3, which was definitely not a platonic thing, especially since the Chapter 3 scene gave you an option to keep DG’s hands off you.
What I’m saying is that the “heating the dance floor up” option was not designed to be just “hanging out with a friend.” Now if your MC stayed late with her in Chapter 3 but kept DG’s hands off your MC, then you should not have gotten the “It was a mistake” dialogue option in Chapter 4 and I need to fix it! You should have gotten an option to say, “It wasn’t really my scene.”
Just let me know.
@OtherGrimm, your comments about Nil’s class and the Mob/Origami scene were both well taken. With Nil’s scene, I had a coding mistake that wouldn’t have triggered the third character to look at if your MC had certain characteristics. It is now fixed. And yes you were also right about not getting your Hmm point from studying with Mob and Origami. I have fixed that. Geez that was a big oversight!
And yes I loved your suggested name for the clown girl. I probably need to write in a semi-crappy superpower into that scene because the MC is the only non-powered student, so if you think of a semi-crappy power to give her, let me know. She’ll still be a jobber but she’ll attack with something better than a trick rubber chicken.
@vampierkid222, I fixed the Stunner percentage oversight. Thanks for pointing it out. Actually, I’ll probably delete those (relationship) messages upon release (unless folks like them) but for now they help me keep track of the ups and downs.
Kept thinking of sky high.
This (Besides Death Reaper) Is byfar one of my favs, and the update to have Personal and Public veiw of you, like the stunner relationship, I think hes an ahole, but DG (The girl of my dreams) Likes him. Or when DG calls you a nerd in class. I cant explain it, maybe some will get it, im still new. Just I dont see that in these games. Its opens immagination, each playthrough is different. Bioware could use you. Peace and Death.