Can we PLZ get Adult Swim to make this a cartoon X-D
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His steampunkesque googles and large rounded metallic hump on his back remain as reminders of his original ‘uniform.’
I like “steampunkesque”, but “googles” should be “goggles”.
Professor California is already on his way back Omaha.
“back from Omaha”, surely?
That’s senstive intell, man.
That’s “sensitive intel”, man. 
Friendzone
I don’t know this Friendzone… but I suddenly want to…
"Is he the guy who can only hover up in a sraight line but can’t move sideways?
“straight”
Your decision to sacrfice yourseif draws a few looks of quiet admiration.
“sacrifice yourself”
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“The Hedonst continues with his announcements.”
Hedonst-Hedonist
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“He may or may not also posesses Zenith-enhanced physical abilities”
I don’t know if anyone pointed this out sooner but:
“Stoic swallows the french fry before responding. “So maybe we’ll never know why she did it. Huh.””
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"Mob gently flicks his index finger against the back of Dirty Girl’s chair, tipping her backward into a heap on the cheap library carpet. Her boots flail in the air like frantic characters in an ill-rehearsed puppet show. She grumbles, “For a so-called pacifist you sure are violent.”
I freaking love this X-D
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i saw a “page_break” in text somewhere, but i can’t remember where 
anyway, there is a bad coded page break xD
Haha you have no idea how much I love this! I showed my wife and I was like, “See there’s Hedonist over there! And look! Dr. Hover in all his hovering glory!”
This must go on the web page, and probably the Facebook page - is that okay?
EDITED TO ADD: Oh, but what is valios time?
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The power of friendship! 
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here’s the typos and consistency errors i found. also got the page_break error and a choice that goes to the wrong label. i only added the labels of where i found the errors this time 'round. it’s kind of late/early for me.
spoilering to be on the safe side.
[spoiler]
Professor Tolliver’s sleek silver smartphone chimes a cheerfully forgettable melody.
inconsistency smartphone = dumbphone
so i’m not the only tasknmaster in your life
label mom_task_goodbye_issue1
his leans in
fixed in label fightscene1 not fixed in label two_targets
the contarian
fixed in label fightscene1 not fixed in label two_targets
I sullenly pinch her cheeck her hair before she can reach mine.
choice in label more_mom_worry
you sneak past everyone sight unseen
daydream, invisibility
stammmers
response of homeless guy in all bribing/hiding/running scenes.
adpative
label good_hide
flatern
label good_hide
AOL discs setting on the desk
label at_home
creating nonlinear and effects unpredictable even to subject.
label bluemorpho_folder2
She clears he throat
label media_relations
googles
label wombat_showdown
stepping backwards away Wombat
label wombat_showdown
Hi-Jinx is tapping on the top of her (reads weird)
chant
no one here can stop here
label alt_hell2
allegience
label alt_hell2
retrive
label tresspal_hell2
, Bacon. Hmmmm Bacon." (missing a " before bacon)
label mobpal_hell2
a ear-splitting roar
issue 6 second sentence
point their smartphones skyward (inconcistency)
label tressleader_rescue_hover2
tottering (teetering? or is that UK english)
label wombat_help
violetly
label wombat_help
it’s downward trajectory.
label wombat_help
squeezes him in ferocious hug.
label wombat_help
But today she She handled the situation poorly.
label grapple_bad_tugged
returns Bbth Tress
label grapple_good
A few laughs ripple through audience.
label press_after_hed
realzing
label press_after_hed
Seige on St. Louis
label press_after_bad and hedonist_bail
Take what you what
label no_breaking
to discuss the Chief
page_break thirty minutes later in label no_breaking
on his way back Omaha
page_break thirty minutes later in label no_breaking
How do you spend you break?
page_break thirty minutes later in label no_breaking
The mood has lightned
label trad_rally and charm_rally
medievel
label nap_lobby
bookscase stuffed with various treatises
label mccormick_search
and few lawyer-themed framed prints (a few/ and a few)
label mccormick_search
file cabinet sets in the back corner
label mccormick_search
Employeee
label mccormick_cabinet
a heartfelt farwell
label dean_certs
image projects from hacking kit
label hack_mccormick and hack_tolly
against the backboard
label breaking_class1
the buses ------ ignore this one, did not know this was apparently the correct plural of bus.
label grocery_girl
chaueffer
label grocery_girl
read tons about about
label grocery_girl
I honestly tell her that I’d love to attend Savior School, if they would ever admit me.
*set savior %+20
*goto prestige_sadie
this does not lead to savior_sadie
I’ve watched videos about the tech they use out that.
label savior_sadie
a caual
label dgtalk_looters
The woman croutches
label scare_yes
buzzing smartphones (inconcistency)
label buzz_phones and end_purge_mchurt and end_purge_manhurt and end_purge_quickiehurt
sacrfice
label shack_sceneleader
And there’s jetpack anywhere.
label wyvern_fake
will taken down Wyvern
label wyvern_fake
I need to get back to down asap.
label fake_out
To soothe any hard feelings about vote
label charm_winner
taps the botton edge
label tress_agenda
reapair the building
label tress_agenda
Stoic’s ignores the comment
label for_groups and for_groups2
about the your assignments
label branchpath_part2
page_break
label grocery_girl[/spoiler]
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Soon one of my biggest questions will be answered, How does the MC plan on tapping into his Zenith powers without the help of a mentor??? So hyped for january!!!
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Shit!
I’ve just changed it for just “time”. I wasn’t even sure that “valious” was the correct adjective.
Yes, of course.
Am I really disliked enough that some greasy spoon refuses to serve me? Really?
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You didn’t experience eating the free fries included in the onion rings?
I did get to start a protest against the place, though. “Feel the Heartburn!”
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Damn,man,put that shit in a spoiler tag.Don’t ruin the moment for other people.
Still no romantic dialogues during the phone call when you’re dating Stunner and having already told him your secret? I’m a bit sad 
There would be in the completed version, right? Right??
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A great update,as always.Keep it up,Eric.
Also,just a note,but it seems that the update doesn’t work on mobile.It only goes up to the police scene and stops there.
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The update is great, I’m loving the new content! Would you mind if I make a pastebin containing spelling and/or grammatical errors so it doesn’t cluster the thread up?
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@The_Otaku_Dragon_Sla, I’m in the process of figuring it out! I don’t have all the three paths mapped out yet, but I know where they have to end, so I’m sorta writing them backword (in my notebooks). Brainstorming is fun.
@komorebi, that is absolutely cool! Just try not to repeat other peoples’ catches, if possible
@Zoilus, first of all, love the screen name! And yes it just means that your Yay was pretty low from Part 1. If you pick the medium or high Yay options in character creation, I think you’ll get different results in that scene.
Way to rub it in about the free 
@Eiwynn 
@AAO, really? It doesn’t work on your phone?
GENERAL COMMENT: Did anyone else find it impossible to reach the update by phone? If so I need to contact dash, but I’ll hold off until others chime in.
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