Min/Maxing is for gaming the system, and I have a standard character type I tend always to play first. You should be able to play the game that is right for you, but if you focus allure first, you will fail the majority of all stat checks…That’s telling me (or punishing me) for having a charisma based character. (I know the game is far from complete, but it does stand out)
Yah it would be nice to have more retorts for Sage, but remember the game has only just started I am sure we will get our 2 cents worth and more XD.
@Rohie I wont never sugarcoat anything to anyone just to make them feel better. It is not Mara way at all. If you ask for feedback well I will try to help viving you what genuine my heart feels about it. I could feel rush or rude but never fake on my feedback. After say that you haven’t nothing to worry about ag all. Good flow and solid plot far better than before better fleshed characters and a logic plot. But your game is just new born a big diamond we have to polish together and you need harsh to polish a jewel. However if you need for your own moral that i shut my grumpy mouth I will with no problem. You are in the good track so cheer up my friend
I thought this sounded funny, the eye colour bit is a bug (probably).
His eyes. That is the first thing you notice about the boy standing before you. Instead of pure black orbs of emptiness, a trait you had long since associated with hunters, they’re the exact same unspecified shade as yours.
Even more coincidental, he seems to be racially ambiguous, like you, as well.
And of average height. The truely average child of a god.
I liked the update. I thought it was a major improvment from what you had last. It was more fleshed out.
I really love that you added an option to ask the God’s why they (the MC) should care for their war. I always wanted that option and to see it available was gold.
You added more depth so I really enjoyed it. I feel a lot of the negative comments were just being very nitpicky.
I love the rewrite lol I have some ideas for responses I would love in the story .
Because of what happened to our girlfriend/boyfriend with the hunters, when Saint and (always forget her name) try’s to take us to the Necromancer I would love a option to say No and tell them off like “yah you people have tried to kill me for 3 years, killed my gf/bf, and most likely killed my aunt so no I won’t go with you and you guys can go f*<@ yourselves.” Then our MC starts to walk away but they say some more stuff to try to convince us. It will obviously lower there relationship but that’s what I wanted to tell them
And
At the ceremony were we make the blood sacrifice to our father. I love! The new options can’t wait to do my Zeus run lol. Here’s another option I would love to have. The option to not make the sacrifice with our father but instead walk towards Athena and tell her something like “you have been my only family my whole life I will only do the ritual for you or no one.” And so she does the I’ll take you under my wing thing and we do the blood sacrifice for her and not our father or maybe for Uncle Henry instead lol
Loved the update! Think about what I said because that would be awesome!
I loved the previous version, but I love the rewrite even better, to me it feels like there is more depth to who the MC character is prior to coming to Olympus. I used to think it was odd that I had such high allure yet never had a girlfriend, I explained it off that I was just in a school of straight girls, now it feels like my MC actually had a bit of a life before. Added to that, like I said in my earlier post it gave me a real reason to kill Saxon when the time came (other than I wanted Zeus as my father) for my MC these jerks are now all to blame for losing Aelin Oh and I love the extra dynamic with Athena, I adored her before but now I really really feel a sense that she is family
I also love how now being a mage has so many opportunities to cast spells, which makes it feel much more than just the “oh you should use an illusion on the door” that it was before. (I haven’t yet had the time to do a playthrough as warrior so I don’t know how that one is now)
The character interactions I thought did flow better, before Saint annoyed me in being so…touchy after he just met me, now I feel like the development of your interactions between the other NPCs are all really building instead of “instant besites”. I do still wish for my dance with Avery, I know I have said it before and I’ll likely say it again but it’s kind of a downer that Cally is the only girl that you can dance with I love the new clothing choices too, the dress I picked for the ceremony…!
Then we have the trial (so far) I love the idea of picking a strategy and having it align with your stats (maybe that is because I chose hero and it wanted allure and wit, which are my strong points ) It was nice to have an added element to keep things fresh and not just “cast a spell” over and over, I’m really interested in seeing how that plays out. I also need to remember to only get hit my non magic arrows during the ordeal so that I can get some “medical attention”
I loved the rewrite. I have been patiently waiting for it and it was great. Tons of more interaction between characters and options to do different things with different skills. I too would like the option to tell off Saint for what happened to the MC’s ex but otherwise great update. Remember, this is your story and you tell it how you want to tell it. Keep it coming and I will keep reading and commenting.
If you’re still interested, the description after you hit 80 Strength is “If there is anyone alive who would willingly go against you, they must be hiding in Tartarus”.
I’m hoping having all this Strength will pay off in the next part of the trials against the savage monster.
@Lizzy has said pretty much my take on things. When a rewrite is better then the original, people are going to be a bit more “strong” in their criticism so it appears they are balancing their praise out …
The thing I like that others don’t is the killing of our first mortal bf/gf. It is a great source of motivation for the MC, especially the magic user who can use their feelings from seeing their loved one murdered to power their connection with the Essence.
Saint is written much more consistently and does not go from invading you space to being hostile for no discerningly reason. Calypso is actually likeable now and I think it is a good call to have her save us instead of appearing out of nowhere and then run after us if we don’t want the interaction.
Plus the option of talking to Avery and Santi before the party now. You certainly convinced me that Avery is a sweetheart and pursue-able and Santi is all right.
All my negativity stems from the fact that I feel like the mc had a life and then it was slowly stolen from her bit by bit. I am simply becoming immersed in my MC, which is good writing.
There are only one thing which irks me, which is the whole guilt thing around the hunters. It irks me that nowhere in the Saints (And somehow Sage’s too) confrontation do we have the option of ranting at him. From the MC’s point of view the hunters very much started the fight and she is glad they are dead/missing. She cannot see their death as murder since all she knows is that they hunted her for no good reason and killed her girlfriend for no good reason and does not begin to consider that they might have been possessed until they way, way later. .
We really need the option of throwing the dead friend/crush in Saint’s faces once they start to throw accusations around, because our MC has a really good reason to think that the hunters/seekers are irredeemable murderers. I would like to be able to somehow be able to throw it in Sage’s face as well, but I would settle for being able to say “what if I did” without the teasing, because my MC would very much like to know what else she supposed to do in that situation.
But it is a small thing, and I generally think that the writing overall is awesome.
Glad to see this updated. It’d been a while since I last played, so I had to refresh my mind a bitime while also absobring new information.
Quick Q: In here:
[spoiler]“That’s an understatement,” Adonis says, smiling. "You coming into Olympus was more like “Hide your children! Board up your windows!”
They all burst into laughter. Calypso’s is loud and abrupt, Adonis’s is melodious, and Saint’s is one of a hyena. He even wipes a fake tear from his cheek.
“Okay, I get it,” you say tersely. “But, seriously. What was all of that about?” [/spoiler]
Why is this our only response to that statement? We even say a screen or two earlier that this was what we imagined. I legitimately felt mortified when I read this.
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now it feels like my MC actually had a bit of a life before. Added to that, like I said in my earlier post it gave me a real reason to kill Saxon when the time came (other than I wanted Zeus as my father) for my MC these jerks are now all to blame for losing Aelin 
Oh and I love the extra dynamic with Athena, I adored her before but now I really really feel a sense that she is family 
I love the new clothing choices too, the dress I picked for the ceremony…
