Checkmate in Three Moves (WIP) (A Drama in which you Inherit your Family Name) (11/03/21)

So. I’d never tried choicescript before in my life 3 weeks ago, but I’ve wanted to write a game on and off for about 6 years, and I finally found the courage and motivation to try it! This is Checkmate in Three Moves (not a chess-based game, in case anybody was looking for that niche) and the vibe I’m going for is sort of an indulgent thriller largely based on interactions with the characters as you navigate the plot. Set in a fictional world with real-world elements, the main motif is a Gatsby-esque Rich People Are Careless and I’d recommend listening to Sober II by Lorde for the atmosphere. (P.S. bear with me when it comes to the stats, they’re kind of a mess and I’m trying to figure out how to strike a balance between implementing them meaningfully and not making the game difficult to get through! I’d like to keep the personality stats as an indicator to how you act and people react to you rather than for checks if possible, but they’re pretty subject to change as I progress.)

4/21/21: It currently stands at about 21,000 words! So far it’s just the introduction to the main cast (minus a Noir, Twenty and Honey scene I’ll add soon) and an attempt at immersion-building, but the next one will actually focus more on MC and the details of their predicament.

Link: https://dashingdon.com/play/herbington/checkmate-in-3-moves/mygame/

Tumblr: https://checkmatein3moves.tumblr.com/

Blurb.

Your parents have been recently disgraced (and in your mother’s case, indicted) and it’s down to you to represent your family name. Both were notorious socialites largely blase to the concerns of others, and you know all too well just how common such an attitude is in your circle. But unfortunately, you are just a single person who can only minimise so much of the damage, if you choose to.
You have enemies, whether you want them or not, and it’s less about who they are than who they’re working with, who else they’re working against, and how you can possibly prove that such talented schemers have it out for you.

Your friends, however, will be the key if you let them. The moments of laughter and happiness in a world where none of you really know where you fit. Sure, your life’s hard, but you’ve got cake, wine, fancy clothes and mixers that last into the wee hours of the morning!

Just hope your house parties don’t turn out like a game of clue.

Finer points.
  • Play as man, woman or non-binary and choose pronouns. No defined sexuality.
  • Host and attend charity balls, galas and parties — though keep an eye out for what the pretty clothes and fancy decorations are hiding.
  • Find out who released the information that doomed your parents — at increasing cost to your safety.
  • Do what you can to alleviate the burden of those wronged by a careless government in a world where capital is more powerful than power itself.
  • Love your friends. Help your friends. Annoy your friends. Catalyse your friends’ growth. Your friends are important, and will largely shape your experience as they face their own challenges alongside you.
  • Fall for your best friend, thaw out an icy heart, dash the bounds of propriety and more.
  • Try to balance all these responsibilities with the effect so many consequences have on your psyche. Good luck!
Update log.

5th May:

  • Wordcount is now 45,100.

  • All main cast is introduced.

  • Jareth’s scene is bulked up.

  • Chapter 2 begins, the plot kicks off.

  • New stats page, changed them up and added descriptions.

  • Sailor is now an inch taller because of a specific scene I was envisioning.

  • A little more lore and life in the universe.

  • Customisable appearance.

If I’m missing anything, please let me know. I’m pretty out of my depth here and pretty nervous to post!!! But I welcome all feedback, even if you want to call me a big fool for attempting 5 billion romance paths (which is totally fine because you would be 100% right) I’m already half in love with all of them.

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I really like what I’m reading!! The characters are all unique, the writing is great, I’m already half in love with Sailor, and I’m excited to read more. I love how you create the atmosphere in the scenes, and you make everything intriguing enough that I keep wanting to learn more about everything going on — what happened to MC, what the rest of the cast is like, how we’ll all make it through together, etc.

Just a quick comment: it would be nice to maybe have character descriptions on the stat screen maybe? A lot of new people get introduced at once and I did have to come back to the forum post to see who is who a couple of times.

Keep up the great work :two_hearts::two_hearts:

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Congrats on publishing your first demo! If you haven’t already seen this thread, it offers some insights regarding the patterns found in published games, one of which pertains to stats.

This is the world that you were born into, the one that forged you in silk, candy and gold.

What a great line. The inclusion of candy just sells it!

You don’t know if you can do this, but you have to do this, because the devil doesn’t wait.

Another really great line. Probably my only minor complaint is the second comma seeming out of place.

the premise was owners letting their pets choose their new significant others for a week, the kind of stimulating content all upstanding men of society needed

The snarky/sarcastic tone found sprinkled here and there is wonderful. I can just hear the polite sneer every so often. It’s delightfully ironic.

a bitter note creeps into his voice.

Missing a capitalization here.


With your explanation of the Gatsby motif and the descriptions of the characters in-game, I couldn’t help but picture a Gatsby era with the characters seemingly have walked out of The Capitol from The Hunger Games.

I also echo @Draconifors about character descriptions in the stat screen and why. With so many people getting introduced at once, it’s hard to keep track of all of them.

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@AChubbyBlackCat @Draconifors thank you both so much!!! I’ll get the little errors soon and I don’t mind moving descriptions to the stats screen as well. tbh I also plan to add a description of the numbered stats but I just haven’t gotten around to that yet. I want to change the stats and the way they affect things as I really get into my style and start on more MC-based scenes past the initial introductions :smile:

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Hebe and Jareth are hot. Kissable, from friends to lovers and the other, from enemies to lovers, how can you not attract warm feelings? It’s like the biggest problem in the game is: “who we want to kiss”, not our parents’ crazy shit. The story has an interesting flow and being an elite drama, with a focus on social interactions, it sounds very promising. It is an extremely detailed, immersive demonstration, a great job. X)

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Looks interesting! (I like everyone :open_mouth:) I’ll definitely be keeping an eye on this.

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do you mayhaps have a tumblr for the game ? : )

I’ll keep this short.

It’s perfect.

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It’s bloody brilliant and well written. @AChubbyBlackCat and @Draconifors already put together how interesting and good this is.

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thay was really good. more then really good it was amazing cant wait for the next update.

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I do not! I’ll consider making one when I get a little bit more out now that you’ve said this though :smile: I’ve never used a tumblr for this kind of thing before

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Oooh I love this!

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I really love the vibe you have going on here! I’ll definitely be keeping an eye on this.

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I absolutely adore this story so far and I’m pretty much in love with it cause the way it’s a written makes them seem to be the type of friends to die for especially Honey and Hebe. I can’t wait to read more and see how this story grows and develops.

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This is a really great game! :heart_eyes: I’m looking forward to getting to know ROs better. They are so diverse interesting. I really like Hebe and Sailor :heartbeat: Good luck with the game!

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That was amazing! All the characters are so believable, I can practically imagine them all in real life, moreover their dynamics are just priceless! And I’m deeply curious how the plot will unfold itself, it certainly will be interesting to keep up with all the intrigues and such :wink: I wish you all the luck with this ptoject!

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I’m so glad I decided to give this a go! The writing is great and I don’t know how I should decide one RO to romance, they’re all so lovely in their own ways. :two_hearts: Though I can already say that I love Sailor. But then again there is Jareth, I can never say no to the enemies to lovers trope…:eyes:

Anyway, good luck and keep up the good work!

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I was really hoping this game would be about a magical game of chess to the death!

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good work :heart_eyes: :shushing_face:

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i like this story so far :nerd_face: plot is very intriguing i’ll keep a eye out for sure .

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