No problem if you need suggestions or just wondering what could a character think or do? Pm me or just ask here people suggestions about how act in certain chase
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I personally prefer things being in order, something about me finishing an incomplete chapter makes me feel unsatisfied.
Releasing big or small updates here and there is up to you, I usually only come on to check up on WIPs and reply to messages, which isn’t that often anymore.
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This. If you need to switch off update styles or release procedure, that is ok too - each person has her own needs and those needs will vary over time.
The CoG community is strong enough to support you, no matter your decision.
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I was about to say what I saw other have said, but I shall say it again because I haven’t said it before. 
Do what works best for you. Big or small updates, in order or not. Changing things because of what you think we might want could potentially upset your whole writing.
Even worse than a writer’s block [ gasp ] 
As for that, take a break, watch a favourite show, read a favourite book, take a walk, re-read what you have written, ask people here - it can rattle your noggin enough to have the dam burst and flood your entire mental bathroom. Don’t ask how a dam and a bathroom connects, by the way, it is on a need to know basis. 
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gah. Just want to add in that I really like this, and I’m curious to what the stag-man is, though it sounds like he’s either some sort of fae or a (seemingly) malicious nature spirit.
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But now I’m curious.
Thanks for the good advice. I actually took a few days off after writing the new outline and I’m all good again I took a break by writing something else though, haha.
He’s, um, certainly something important.
I’ll probably have another update in a day or two that might answer some questions. Er, probably… although it might just make more.
I’m thinking you guys are pretty perceptive, though, and I’m as subtle as a brick so I’m sure you’ll get it.
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Curiosity is good, without it we would never have look behind the nearest hill, the one beyond that and so on. 
You’re quite welcome, glad it helped.
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Once your father is sure the scots were gone he waves you over to him. Finn, you made me proud today and proved yourself a man. Now as a man I will expect you to join me on patrols and if the Earl of Northumbria calls me you will join me. {Also (without out) your skill with your bow we would have lost and so I will buy you a stout longbow.} It won’t be a (yew) warbow but it should serve to deter many enemies which you will undoubtedly face. Now let us go to your mother and sister so they will not worry." With that the two of you trudge up the path leading to where the women and children fled.
After defeating the Scotts this passage came up the word"out" is repeated twice where I believe that was not the intention. Look for the parenthesis also is “yew” correct it sound weird but maybe that is historical. Also I know you said no grammar but it is bugging me that you seem to be using sentences that are just a tad too long. Almost every other paragraph there is a sentence that seems like it should be made two for example look at the { }. I don’t want to write your story for you but consider using “Without your skill today we would have lost. You have made me proud and as reward for your bravery I shall buy/purchase you a stout bow.”
Loving the story btw.
In the section directly after:
Over the next four years you join your father and the (fyrd) as they patrol the land around Riverton. During this time you grow and are soon as large as your father and can hold your own against him in mock sword (bouts). Your archery skills also grow and you can now draw a full strength longbow and shoot with a high level of skill.
Is “fyrd” Another historical reference or misspelling? “Bouts” sounds a little more historical but I thought I’d bring it up also.
After telling my father that I have dreamed of the day I could prove our name:
“I knew you would be ready to prove yourself and our name my son and will await your return eagerly” says your (father",Now) let us tell your mother and sister the good news."
Just a simple mistake.
Lol sry and thanks. .
Since i dont want this lovely thred to die i will start and ask @iris how´s it going? By the way will there be more father moments?, if i am not asking for toooo much 
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@GloriaRose Hello! Sorry for the wait 
I got a new job and had a mild health crisis so I’ve been busy. There should be an update soon, just gotta edit some things when I have time.
You can hang out with your dad a bit at the beginning of part two (which will be in the next update). Also you’ll be going to Carhalow city with him!
Dad doesn’t really say much to you until you’re older, unfortunately. He’s… Kind of distant lol.
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Crazy Baby is a Troublemaker… lol Also violet eyes. Hehe
I shall break daddy yet. He almost laughed the last time. 
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Finally got a chance to play and really enjoyed it! I love the premise. You do a great job of building the reader’s curiosity (though I hope we get at least a few answers soon!), and the writing is excellent. Looking forward to more!
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Its looking good so far, I didn’t pick out any spelling or grammar mistakes (but they might still be there). The story idea is very interesting and I’m excited to see where it leads.
@Jinx_the_Atomic_Cat Hahaha. I know violet eyes are very romance novel-y but I hate the letter p and I refuse to call them purple.
@Taylor_Enean I think Theron has only smiled, like… twice so far. And the first time was after coming home after 3 years. You have a tough challenge ahead of you 
There should be a scene where you can make him laugh eventually. I’ll make it an achievement haha.
@jeantown I’m not gonna lie, my heart fluttered a little when I saw your comment hahaha. Guen’s my favorite game on the forums 
I haven’t written any concrete answers yet, but I have a lot of hints in the works. I’m sure people will figure it out!
@Sampl15 I’m sure there are, haha. I’m an awful speller. Thanks for reading!
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