BREACH - Crime Thriller WIP (UPDATED! 29-November-2018!) (800k+ Word)

comedy
young-adult-fiction
nonbinary-inclusive
gender-choice

#1733


@MichaelMaxwell I think there is a second (make you ) in the second choice P.S sorry for the nitpicking


#1734

I may or may not have had this poll already, but let’s see again!

Please pick the role you picked as your first time playing the game.

  • Driver - Leadfoot
  • Engineer - Chains
  • Gunner - Shotty
  • Crowd Control - Smiley

0 voters

Hey, never be sorry for nitpicking my game… Remember, nitpicking is encouraged :grin:


#1735

Yeah I thought you might have already made a poll I just didn’t feel like scrolling through to see if you had


#1736

Found it… and oh god, I this is so way back in the past, I could see my naive self still writing those cheesy first chapter scenes…


#1737

I have encountered 2 errors (both in chapter)

1st error

The first one happened after I entered VAM Corp building and tried to open the lock in 82F door shooting in the lock(also, the game don’t show my gun’s model, so maybe that’s the reason?)
ERRORR ERRORR Script Error, ended early. Please report.

please put this in your report (error: 13131) = Dropped out of line

BUG SQUASHER! AWAAAAYY!!

Please post the codes below for review (copy and paste all)

Variable codes

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She she
Shim her
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mr Ms.
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MCbottom jeans
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MCnonbin false
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AnnaCharliePair false
AllGirlPair false
AllMenPair false
TeamAPair false

I don’t know if this has been informed before, but there’s also a glitch before the first heist as Archangel (in my case robbing the ATM gallery) that if I visited Greg and saw his Greg’s Glorious Goods and then trained my skills, the time would not matter anymore and I would be able to train infinitely

2nd error


This appeared a moment after Gabriel pulls us in, trying to get to 79th floor (sorry about my english)


#1738

Found and FIXED! Will be included in the next update…

Really? It’s still going? damn, I thought I fixed that already. This is gonna be the bane of my editing sessions.

Fixed already, will be in the next update…


#1739

Really thanks for this special update! It’s a really good game.
I finished my first run now, and wow! I was left wanting more. The playtest end for an undercover was really, really good

A bit of nitpicking

This one is just a typo, Kaidan’s name was spelled wrong: “Gabriel said Kiadan’s ready to go…”

Screenshot

When I first read it I thought it was wrong (it sounded really strange in my head lol), but after rereading, it may be right? So I’m sending just to make sure!
It’s the “And I think you for that…”.

Screenshot

This one I think it’s missing text (the last paragraph)

Screenshot


#1740

Thank you! It’s been about 2 years since I started writing it…

I was scared it might go off as a bit of a cliche or even provoking. I’m glad it turned out okay… :sweat_smile: But it doesn’t really end there… there’s still more to the undercover story arch than that

Found and FIXED! Will be included in the next update


#1741

Hey at the `

Summary

Bit where the outfit attack you in your apartment and took and bishop arrive to save you, if you die and go to checkpoint your health doesn’t go back to what it was it stayed at -87 etc so it made it impossible to continue

` just thought you should know but I love the game so far :grin:


#1742

Well that’s a problem. We’re trying to figure out what’s causing it… Can’t seem to pinpoint the problem… :sweat:

Thank you! Glad you love it :blush:


#1743

@MichaelMaxwell have you heard of the game payday 2 ? It reminds me of this game


#1744

heard of it? This game is inspired by it :rofl:

This game is inspired by a lot of things. Mostly Payday and GTA 5… and a few Bioware and Bathesda games…


#1745

Just spotted a spelling mistake on the word him it’s says hin instead. It’s in one of the choices see picture below (the handcuffs were for a friend)


#1746

Fixed!

Sure it is… :smirk:


#1747

@MichaelMaxwell not that I am doubting your creativity but I assume that payday and gta5 are what gave you the idea of having a custom masks while doing a hiest


#1748

@MichaelMaxwell I don’t know if you plan on doing this in the next update or you haven’t seen it and I have told you this before but I found this


On the second choice there are the words “make you” after the word “completely” , man you must hate me right now constantly asking you questions :confounded:


#1749

I’m sure he don’t mind the help in pointing out the mistakes. It’s nice to have a fresh set of eyes with WIPs.


#1750

Payday more than GTA 5. But yes, they are the inspiration for the mask making system. What was a complete pain in the ass to make however, was the dice rolling system.

I fixed it already, and I haven’t updated the game yet.

No, not at all! In fact I’d love you to keep them coming!

Yes, yes it is. Again, nitpicking IS encouraged!


#1751

OK cool

That’s good although I’m all out of questions but I’m sure I’ll bombard you with some more soon !:joy:


#1752

loads question cannon when do you plan on inviting more people into the beta testing if you do plan on adding more people if not I’m fine I just know I would love to beta test this game but for now I’m happy to sit on the sidelines and point small spelling errors