BREACH - Crime Thriller WIP (Update #40 30-March-2019) (800k~ Word)

comedy
young-adult-fiction
nonbinary-inclusive
gender-choice
#3548

Are we not going to be able to the major bank in the first half? I remember that never being an option earlier.

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#3549

Error report (or long convoluted post) number: whatever one this is

Summary

I’d remove the out from outperform. I’m no in competition to do any better than anyone. Maybe I could outperform acrobats whilst I lift weights? Just, revise the out from outperform.

haha funny theory. Gabriel’s our long-lost twin from birth, that’s why he never takes off his mask. oh god wait nvm what if players romance him oh no what have I done


So I have a baby’s face, but it’s been stretched to fit my skull. That’s horrifying.

huh. So for whatever reason my computer has an affinity for skipping the text box where I can input my last name. Apparently my phone does it as well. Quite strange. Anyways…

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Yeah, it’s got nothing on the '69 vorcette… manta ray…

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Period after away, unless it’s the coding bug you mentioned a while ago

This is one sentence? Quite the mouthful. I want to give advice for this, but I can’t think of an alternative way to write it. Ignore this one.

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change is to are

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change period to comma

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I’ve noticed a distinct use of the “as he” phrase here. Maybe this time, change this to “…coming” He says, pulling out his phone. idk, maybe just to change it up a bit.

Why no mention of how I just blew the robber’s head clean off his shoulders? I do believe that they’d mention if the gun was discharged recently.

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Don’t be a baby

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Oh boy… Let’s not jump to conclusions, mr. narrator…

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Add a period behind him. For reference, I’m at the part where mouse leaves to help Gabriel with a job.

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Her should be here

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He has 2 1911’s, therefore an 's should be added after “1911” unless, of course, this is a coding limitation.

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Period after held.

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Add period after security

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Add a period after good.

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add a period after him.

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possible should be possibly.

add a period after that.

Anyways, that’s it for tonight. I’ll do more tomorrow. please man I wanna see more raquel scenes i swear i will pay for them

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#3550

-Placing my hand on my chest- Awww.

I’m really enjoying Rook’s dialogue.

:eyes: I need it.

I agree. Mouse was first until Rook came into the picture. I imagined Rook nudging Mouse out of the number one spot with a smirk on his face, while Mouse is left in the number two spot with a sad face :joy::sob: (I still love you Mouse, don’t worry).

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#3551

addendum: taste should be tastes.

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#3552

It’s hilarious if you think about it. When Rook first came into the picture guns blazing at Gabriel, I was like “Oh hell no” and now it’s like I’m the President of the Rook Protection Squad :tm: Mouse is cute like a younger brother or a puppy and Rook…well…Rook is Rook :rofl:

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#3553

:ok_hand: Exactly.

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#3554

Let me in on the Rook Protection Squad, I’ll be Vice President. :relaxed:

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#3555

They’ve been friends since childhood. Not a whole lot of things are going to break that apart.

If you were to hear Bishop’s backstory, he really needs more love. In fact he probably needs help… Which is why Rook is there. Mainly to keep him busy :laughing:

Rook: Friends stay, lovers lay. Glad to have met you either way

And I enjoy writing it :laughing:

I think Rook wouldn’t mind sharing the #1 spot.

Rook: You know you've made it in life when someone could only describe you as yourself~

He is quite… Unique, to say the least.

Rook: Being unique is the least of my skills.

Is everything a skill to you?

Rook: If you're damn good at it, yes

And Rook will be Rook

Rook: Is this a squad of the people I'll be protecting?

Um, no it’s the squad of people who will be pro-

Rook: I shall guard you all with my life!

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#3556

So i had saw a post a while ago about the games length being cut in half, but couldn’t find the post again to figure out the context of how the game was shortened. If someone could elaborate that’d be great. Also I don’t know if its a bug or not but the game doesn’t seem to give the choice to wear the bulletproof suit and a tactical vest under it. I try equipping one and the other one automatically comes off.

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#3557

The game is now being split into two books, so yes the content will technically shorten, but there will be a whole other book afterwards! :smiley:

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#3558

This is because the bulletproof suit is technically an Armour in of itself. Unfortunately, you cannot wear any other armour if you’re wearing that suit. Not unless I make a whole new set of variables for it, and a whole new equip and dequip script for it… and Ben does not like the sound of that, he’s already shaking his head at me as I’m writing this :laughing:

That is correct. In order to save time (and my sanity) I’ve decided to split the game into two because just half of this game is already around 800,000 words including the codes. It’s been quite the process, and I’m honestly quite tired of not having anything done yet for the past 4 years.

The first half of the game will consist of The prologue, Chapter 1-3, and half of Chapter 4 which will technically be the epilogue, but not really because the whole story is actually two books…

Can there be two epilogues and two prologues in a two part story? I’m not really sure…

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#3559

Awww gotcha! I guess that’s even better since that would technically make the story longer in the end which I don’t mind in the slightest haha.

Okay the suit thing makes sense. Another thing I noticed is that there wasn’t much point buying the bulletproof mask from the GGG store since you could get the full bulletproof face mask for less and be safer as well.

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#3560

I’m assuming it’s the Kevtac Helmet VS the Titanium Reinforced Hockey Mask.

The titanium reinforced hockey mask will protect only your face from the front, and is able to block up to a .44 magnum. It’ll save you from pistol and revolver rounds, but it won’t stop all rifle rounds. The full-face helmet offers better protection, and better coverage, since it covers the whole head, which is why it’s much more expensive.

But then again, I do agree, 60k is a bit too much.

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#3561

So I’m torturing Andrew. I shoot him, with my REX Revolver. Yet, the game thinks I’m using a p-90. I did, however, use the p-90 the last time I used a weapon, so maybe that has something to do with it?

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#3562

Missing variable change. Fixed!

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#3563

Why do I always get hungry when playing this game??? Damn those tasty food options!! :sob::sob:

Anyways, I played Raquel’s romance (among others) and I’m curious about how her romance is gonna play out. With the rest of the ROs, we can hang out with them and slowly build up the relationship, but that’s not available for Raquel. Will the option to hang out with her be added with future updates or is her romance going to be relatively smaller when compared to the others and maybe expanded upon in the sequel?

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#3564

Most of the time, I write the game on an empty stomach :laughing: There’s not much to eat and I kinda have to save up, but writing the game takes my mind off of it… up until I write the food options.

Raquel and Gabriel have their own unique relationship lines. You can’t hangout with them, but later as the game progress, because you can’t exactly ignore the trio as they are the main characters of the game.

It’s not really small, I’m just not done with it yet.

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#3565

You pull out your golden 9508848 bat and you whack him right on the arm, causing his whole right arm to burst into dust. He gasps in surprise as you reel back for another bash, this time, directly at his face. You bash him across the face, and his whole head bursts into dust.

His body rolls of the seat, and onto the floor, limp. ERRORR ERRORR Whoops! Something went wrong here! Well, um… you better report this in the forum!

Please put this in your report ==> Error = sayplease

Last run script = “woundcheck”

BUG SQUASHER! AWAAAAYY!!

Please post the codes below for review (copy and paste all)

Variable codes

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She she
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ERROR -

Ummm this showed up in chapter 3…

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#3566

@Bookz23 - you broke the game with a golden bat.

Grats! I don’t think this has been done in the history of gaming. :100:

@MichaelMaxwell - you shouldn’t set your adoring fans up like this - :sob: :sob: :sob:

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#3567

I see nothing wrong here it worked great it inflicted damage and crashed the game.

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