Quick grammatical error here.
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ayy lmao someone broke the game with the error weapon!
Reminds me of this happening in gmod:
godā¦ the horrorā¦
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So, hereās another collective of errors that Iāve found. At least, I think theyāre errors.
Summary
Fire should be fires
Mirrors? Do you mean windows?
Collide should be collides
Dudeā¦ I just rolled straight 4ās on every skill checkā¦ But Iāll take your word for it.
Iād remove few. Or if you want to keep few, add something like meters or yards and remove distance. idk, my take on that.
Everything? Maybe revise that. Replace it with like, the strap that heās aiming at. Or remove āeverythingā
Breathe should be breath.
taste should be tastes
add an a after and, before single
trickles should be trickle, or the sentence should be ābut you can sense as his confidence slowly trickles out of himā, add an as after sense.
Should the empty gun message be here? idk, it just interrupts the flow for me a bit. If nothing here is wrong, ignore this.
burnt it all
Gabriel says
There are multiple cartels, right? If so, then this should be "So the cartels are running the show, are they?
For godās sake
So he orders a sandwich and friesā¦ and the worker asks if he wants fries with that?
oh, addendum:
I donāt have 2 jobs to do, just 1 is available.
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Sorry for the late reply, I was a tad bit busy out of town 
As tempting as that sounds, Gabriel and Michael has their own thing going on after Breachā¦
Rook can be quite the handful, but he can take care of himself. But hopefully, in Rookās next hangout, you can see more of Bishop as you would of Rook. The two come hand in hand, so to speak 
Rook:
To question that is to question his existence.
Heās generally stubborn anyway. 
If the save data was from before the update, then Iām sorry to say that it is no longer usable.
Fixed!
Oh god please, youāre giving me PTSD
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Fixed them!
The only problem is that the lock open script works perfectlyā¦ on a revolver that shouldnāt lock open.
Thatāsā¦ the joke. Perhaps I should change that. Iāve actually had this happen in real life while I was ordering food.
Everything else is FIXED!
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Geez manā¦ You work fastā¦
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Iāve finally created an account on the forum after playing over 10 COG games. This will be my very first time posting anything on the forum and I choose your WIP to do so because I just canāt contain the amount of joy I have for this masterpiece. I just wanted to say that I appreciate you and everybody else that have contributed so much time into this beautiful piece of work! I would have to jump into the Rook protection squad because I smile every time he came up. Canāt forget the badass baking machine Gabriel either. Your update was a pleasant surprise and if you had to ask about my reaction to the new ROs updates: 
I canāt wait to see more amazing work from you and follow the updates until the big finish! 
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Awe! Thank you very much! I feel honored to be the first game you post in This game has taken quite a while to make, but hopefully it should be done soon.
Thank you! Itās been quite the ride for us but with everyone elseās help pitching in, and @Fonex helping out in some of the most desperate of times, and everyone in the forum sending feedbacks and reports, everything is going absolutely stellar! 
Iāve moved Rook up the priority list so his hangout should be coming soon.
Itās the same reaction Iāve had when I realized Iām actually going to finish this game
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Well, itās monday! time for another nitpicking!
Nitpicking stuff
Unreachable if condition
Chapter1A line 6036 and 6038
*if AllMenPair and *if AllGirlPair
I think you havenāt made a function to turn those values to true in the first place.
And you need to update those āDiscuss this gameā link in the index file. Because it leads to inexsistent topic.
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missing spaceā¦ FIXED
Missing script. Fixed!
Dashingdon thing, Fixed!
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I hope I could still play the matchmaker between Gabriel and Raquel eventhough Iām romancing someone.
As much as intriguing Gabriel and Raquel are, Avelyne is still the only one that could melt my icy heart 
And I really want to see them both together.
Welp, I could already feel lots of death stare from Gabriel and Raquel fans 
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Keep your distance from Raquel pls.
Jokes aside though, I thought they were a couple (-ish) before I learned that they were both romance options.
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When everyone keeps talking about how much they love Rook and you keep killing him.
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Thatās alright! I hope it was a productive day!
I donāt suppose I can offer MCās services as a mediator?
Now thatās a two-for-on special I wouldnāt mind having. I kind of have trouble picturing either one of them on their own but then again, weāve only ever seen them together!
Couldāve saved me a lot of time if I knew my Knight-in-Shining-Armor drove a taco truck! MC has a new mission: keeping Rook in the friendzone. I mean beneath all the weirdness (and more weirdness), heās so sweet and caring and stubborn and loyal and funny andā¦ahem I hope Gabriel didnāt hear thatā¦
If you ever gt around to that Rook story of yours, Iād love to have this question answered 
Customer satisfaction rating: 
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So Iāve some plot spoilers here, for those who havenāt played through the first time meeting the Chess Club
Summary
I always feel bad after killing Rook, I keep thinking that the old woman that answers his phone for the hangout is his grandmother or something. Iām blurring that in case thatās true.
But I always play through the rooftop scene, and I wonder what happens to Bishop after we fire at him and pass the skill check. Do we kill him? Do we wound him?
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I must be honest, Iāve run out of ideas for Mouseās hangout
Iām waiting on Ben to come up with some brilliant plan.
They were supposed to be a couple anyway, if the MC were to not date either of the two.
Rookās the type of person that you either hate or love. If you hate him, then I shall give you the option to try and kill him. Otherwise, go ahead and hangout with him
I suggest you buy some protective gear before you do so.
Unfortunately, Bishop wonāt be making an appearance in Rookās Chapter 3 romance ending. That oneās just him
But yes, Rook and Bishopās dynamic complements one another pretty well, so well that if you just had Rook, heād just be a crazed maniac with little sense of seriousness or reality. If you had Bishop all by himself youād have an emotionless and sometimes heartless bland assassin.
Instead you have the Spiced Taco Sociopath and the Sweeto Burrito Sociopath. Together, theyāre Deranged Chess Assassins.
Rook: *Slams his forehead against the table* ... I'm fine *Smiles*
This is something not even Rook himself can answerā¦ but maybe Bishop can. 
That is trueā¦ Abuelita may not be related to Rook by blood, but she took him in when no one else would, and sheās the only family Rook has left aside from his biological sister. who is in a mental institution
Youāve made him severely reconsider his life choicesā¦
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So, errors/nitpicks/observations.
Summary
Oh, I really want to insult Rook now, Iām too proud of that chess club joke. Unless itās been made already.
Unnecessary comma after cartels.
goes should be go, remove comma
Capitalize cartels.
Stuff should be things, or the sentence should be āI have some stuff I need you to doā
should should be shoulder
Here, mouse is referred to as female āRaquel stares at herā. Mouse in my game is a dude, seen here:
yeah, itās strange.
Iād remove the first instance of going.
Iād remove āof aā
Pull should be pulls
Unless mouse has multiple shirts in-hand, these should be this.
So, will dates remain the same? Or will you update them to present-day/near future?
Sofa should be sofas.
How come Iāve never realized this? Do I lack basic detail perception? I mean, I knew about the whole joke where everyone called you Gabriel for a time. But wasnāt your profile pic purple once?
Using morbidly seems out of place here. Iād use terribly, horribly, very, and other synonyms. Morbid means diseased (at least, form what Iāve learned in my medical class), or an āabnormal/unhealthy interest in death-related matters.ā but hey, do whatever.
I mean, this isnāt a big deal. But the term fella, indicative of male, followed by the āfellaā being Sarah, confused me a bit. btw is this a Life is Strange reference? Iāve never played, but some of the characters sound familiar.
Should be āshe says angrilyā
I wouldnāt say sheās complaining it. Maybe recalling it? idk, complains seems like a strange choice of words.
Iād add a comma after wait. but should it be there? hmmm. idk.
Uniform should be uniforms
Hop should be hops.
Add period after relief?
Soā¦ about the elevators. At VAM Tower. The commercial elevator limit is 500 meters (Thanks for that insanely helpful factoid, physics class!), so why do we get onto a second elevator? Unless VAM tower has abnormal ceiling heights, causing it to be higher than 500 meters at 100 stories. Iām sorry man Iām just really focused on a construction test for my physics class. ignore this
Colonel should be capitalized, iirc. Proper noun. unless it isntā¦
And this does it for tonight.
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Crack knuckles ā¦ Letās go.
As for what Iāve written, I need it to stay the same.
Yes, once. But itās mainly this colour.
But no, Gabrielās mask is different than my smiley face.
āMorbidly worried sickā is something Iād say in real life. I donāt know if thatās wrong but no oneās said anything yet.
First off, I donāt know why I use the word āfellaā to describe any person regardless of gender, so I may be using it wrongā¦
Yes and no. Caulfield is the name of the protagonist, but thatās where the similarities end.
I just liked the name.
As itās been explained in the gameā¦ There are two different types of floors in the tower. The normal floors, and the high security floors. The normal security elevators cannot stop at High security floors, and the high security floors only start at the 80th floor.
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So Iām from the American Midwest. Most around here (In the area I live in anyway) use it to indicate male individuals. It may be different elsewhere, though.
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Quickly butting in here! Iāve never seen fella being used in reference to anyone but a male. And if Iām not mistaken, ādameā would be the female equivalent? Thereās the word ābroadā as well but thatās a bit old fashioned and a bitā¦yeah.
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