It’s interesting. I notice in the dream. You have a chance to stand up to the school bully. I’m sure the dream has some deeper meaning. Though I can’t help but notice there wasn’t much detail expect the school bully. Even if he did hit you. I would adored some detail into what location. How hard. Did anyone see it. I’m sure questions will be answered.
On to ShoeLip’s point. You do jump around a tiny bit to saying “You” and “He” I feel like you should stay with one perspective and stick with it. It’s a work in progress. I’ll wait till I read the entire thing.
@Jason_Miller That’s not supposed to be there. It seems there must have been a coding error. Because if you selected the option I think you did it should have taken you to the end of the demo automatically
@Jason_Miller and @Shoelip
Now that I’ve gotten some feedback from some people who pmd me as well as your friends I plan to take out the whole enemy side perspective thing.
After thinking about it there’s a simpler for me to get the point I intended with that across.
So how many did you input of the enemy perspective in your stories?
@Xero_Espadas Well what my original plan was to every now and then show what’s happening on the enemy’s side of things like you see in most mecha anime focusing on the Ace Pilot Lieutenant Ansar Bahir the current Black Wolf and the OUR’s perspective on the war like how in Gundam Seed with Athrun Zala and ZAFT. United We Fall did something similar and it turned out pretty well.
If you see any other side plots go on with the enemy’s side it’s simply because Ansar is in or within listening distance of the room. Whether it be something serious or as mundane as noticing two unnamed officers meeting for a quick make out session.
Now after recent feedback I’m debating between adjusting it significantly or removing it entirely
I happen to like the idea of the enemy’s perspective as it reminds me of the novel Killer Angels. It’s a good idea, you should keep it.
@WubWub117 I’ve thought about that too, but them it becomes a matter of changing around the order
I’ve got a question about the beam rifle can it be set to a single beam shot or can it be set to fire multiple bits of beams?
@ninja6398 In the Brave Breakers universe beam weaponry technology is still extremely new only about a decade old, so to answer your question no only a single beam with each pull of the trigger.
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are adressed my members of the school’s staff
This is from the the orientation, i think you meant by members of the schools staff.
Like the game so far.
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Your friend that’s driving the car is a 17-year old dirty blond haired boy, but that’s only because in order mentioned his birthday is not for another 2 months
Huh, what does this mean
Also on the same page you write pernounce instead of pronounce and incistent instead of insistent.
It means exactly as it sounds, and I’ve noticed I plan to correct it once I finish writing the rest of chapter 1
Here’s the ever looked forward too second temporary codex update.
OUR BCV Akula Submarine
Armaments: 2 Missile batteries one located in the port and starboard aft of the submarine, 4 torpedo launchers in the bow, and a hangar for 6 Breakers.
History: While the OUR military does poses BCV carriers in their arsenal, they’re super ceded by High Command’s preference for several smaller mobile naval vessels for quick response given their vastly difference size to the UEFG military. The BCV Akula-class submarines are the OUR’s answer to the UEFG’s reliance on large carriers for their helicopters, jets and Breakers. A quick mobile vessel, the Akula sub is a commonly deployed as scouting ships, the transportation means of Special Forces Breaker Pilots, and thirdly in OUR Fleets. Provided both sides are operating with optimal efficiency 2 Akula subs have the combat performance equivalent of a UEFG Breaker Carrier.
The School
Founded: Aprx 80-90 years ago
Purpose: A very secretive OUR government funded military school that commonly takes in orphans, the young children of poor parents, and on very rare occasion children of influential OUR citizens.
From the moment of admission students are trained to be soldiers to serve in a combat role in the OUR military… most commonly as but not necessarily exclusive to as Breaker Pilots or Braves. Most fresh OUR recruits are trained and educated for a few months to a couple of years depending on their desired field, but students of the school are often given training and education for over a decade in addition said training and education are closer to the level given to SpecOps hopefuls. Said training lasts until a student reaches the age of 18 or completes all off the required courses for their intended career path. The result being young talented soldiers loyal to the OUR with vastly superior military capability when compared to normal recruits of equivalent rank. Because of said ability graduates of the school commonly hold military ranks that only soldiers 5-8 years their senior would normally have.
Brave
A nickname given to all Breaker pilots regardless of affiliation. The nickname surfaced shortly after the invention of the Breaker. Due to the sheer number of stories, historians can’t definitely prove any one tale as the reason behind the nickname’s existence. The most popular story however is the Lunar Colony fire of 2187 AD where a group of Breaker pilots against official orders put out a large fire on the moon that would have destroyed billions of dollars of investments all the while saving thousands of lives in the process.
Code Name: Black Wolf
Real Name: Ansar Bahir
Gender: Male
Hair: Dark Brown
Eye: Dark Red
Age: 18
Rank: Lieutenant
History: The man is of Kurdish descent, though is not religious what so ever. Ansar Bahir graduated from “The School” in 2332 AD four years into the war, and is now a days is considered to be the perfect soldier and leader by his superiors. Perfectly balances consoling/scolding his men, scored top marks in marksmanship training, and second highest in melee combat training during his years at the school. Earned the right to keep his title of “Black Wolf” as a result of his conduct during the second battle of midway where he prevented the total destruction of the OUR Naval fleet sent to take the island by destroying 3 UEFG Destroyers and shooting down 3 Breaker Ace pilots.
Unusual Hair/Eye Color Phenomenon
At first seeing humans with blue, hero red, white, pink, etc hair/eye color was only possible through the power of hair dye or animation. In the old days of Earth anyone who said they had such a natural hair color would be lying, but today though in the minority such a thing is actually common.
Scientists have determined this phenomenon to be due to an unexpected genetic mutation found only in second gen space colonists and beyond. Said mutation is believed to be the result of the simulated sun found in larger space colonies. It should be noted that this mutation doesn’t pose a health risk to those who have it. Essentially if you see someone walking down the street on Earth with say naturaly silver hair then either they or someone in their ancestry are second gen and beyond space colonists.
@Zeta_Voidis So do Breakers still have normal bullet rifles then? Cause if its a single beam it would have a lower rate of fire. So I can imagine the military would field squads with a mix of beams and bullets. Bullets to suppress and beams for the kill, something like that.
Found a few spelling errors and a grammer error. Durring the whole affair the new students are adressed my members of the school’s staff and if available at the time; they are also given a speech by the president of the UEFG. and
“I’m sorry man, but I really didn’t mean to pernounce your name wrong.” another
First her combs back his dark brown if not black hair rather tightly,
and another
and most importantly rely on the strength of your leader the current Black Wolf and come bac alive." Captain Omari said growing more passionate vwith each word.
more with each page.
if you’ve woken up from your nightmare and have arrived at your with the rest of your friends.
During the whole affair the new students are address by members of the school’s staff and if available at the time; they are also given a speech by the president of the UEFG.
“I’m sorry man, but I really didn’t mean to pronounce your name wrong.”
First he combs back his dark brown if not black hair rather tightly,
and most importantly rely on the strength of your leader the current Black Wolf and come back alive." Captain Omari said growing more passionate with each word.
if you’ve woken up from your nightmare and have arrived at your orientation with the rest of your friends.
@ninja6398 First let me be a little more specific on beam rifles in this story. They’ll function akin to the manner you see in anime like Gundam. I apologize for not being specific enough in that regards.
As for the military applications since beam technology is fairly new… yes it would be a mixture of bullets, beam shots, and beam sabers for the OUR.
Since the UEFG had only recently gained the ability to produce beam sabers and not rifles it’ll just be that and solid bullets for them
@Zeta_Voidis
Ok thanks for answering my question.
So … much , gundam … I can’t take it!!!
Oh and will you implement something similar to Dragoons in your game?
@alexxo97 I’m considering it, but I haven’t decided either way. If I do decide to put it in however it won’t be in the first book
