ah finaly its in the forum was waiting for it , saw your wip on dashington and it did catch me pretty much , glad to see you now here 
wish you the best for the wip
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Noticed that in the *label dreamrelfection in the ifs you wrote two times bodysuit together, but in one if, you wrote body suit apart. (To be more clear in the if 'professorknowpast = “unknown” ')
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Minor note, when the POV shifts to people besudes the MC, it should probably say the mc’s name or other third person descriptions of them rather than second person.
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Really enjoyed it, gives me a lot of x23 vibes but with John wick action scenes. Looking forward to more.
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x23? Is this also a choise script game? Or some other media.
Nevermind found myself. You mean the Charakter from Marvel/X-Men
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Yep. I was bit confused why X-23. Knew it was Laura.
Laura maims at best not kills. She also doesn’t teleport. (Well, last time I read her comics years ago anyway.)
But that’s what the facility that made Laura trained her to do, she had an entire scent-based berserk trigger. There was also that entire arc where I forget if it was Scott or the other X-Men leader of the time had that dark assassination squad and Wolverine was super pissed that they were exploiting her like that.
I used the knives so I was very stabby as well. : D I just wanted to say overall I really enjoyed what was here.
I found this wip a month ago I believe and I gotta say I really liked it i was pretty much hooked, and I’ll definitely be following along
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So your talking about Tracker, not MC then. I misread.
Tracker that left us few years ago has the scent ability to trace. MC has high senses but not like Tracker.