@Morphine Thanks for point these out! 
Iâll be sure to fix them later today.
@Noah Thanks! Hope you enjoyed. Iâll be working one fixing typos later today but if you spot any more feel free to post them. 
@Shin_Lee Glad youâre enjoying the story! 
I spotted qiute many though mostly missing âsâ
e.g. âshe helpâ it should be âshe helpsâ most of this nature so no biggies
Ah okay, gotchya!
Samanthaâs labor might be a bit longer, since its her first baby.
In the end chose chose to name himâŚ
Extra chose there and forgot you
Will we eventually get to have our own child with our RO?
Having children of your own will be possible. Though some ROs will be less inclined to do so. It wonât be probably with EVERY RO. And will mostly happen closer to the end of the story/stories.
Thatâs great I would be fine with it being an epilogue sort of ending. Like with me and Samantha giving her son a brother or sister at the end.
This is a nifty idea. 
I approve.
I would love it if I could be with everyone, since it would be a little sad, and unfair for the MC not to be able to have your own child (NOT because we do not love our other child)
The option to have kids with the four main characters is a definite
I mean yes and no. If you choose to continue to romance a RO whoâs adamant on not having kids itâs something the MC accepts or doesnât. If a RO doesnât want kids youâd find that out well before the end of the game.
Iâm glad you find the story interesting!
So will Samantha tell us whoâs the father of son? Or was it just some one night stand gone wrong?
A bit disappointing, I know we can not force the other party when he does not want to, but if you look at him from a certain perspective, itâs still unfair for Mc if he has the desire to have his own son.
Sorry, I had not read the comment that the opcion to be able to have a child with the 4 main characters is final, that had made me a little sad.
by the way I had forgotten to say that I love the theme you chose for this story !!
She probably wonât bring it up but there might be an opportunity to ask her about it.
Sam definitely knows the father on a somewhat personal level. She didnât get pregnant by a complete stranger but her thoughts on him would be along the lines of âyouâre hot, we hooked up, thatâs itâ.
She doesnât see the identity of the father as something thatâs super important or as somethkng she has to share with other people.
Look at who from a certain perspective? A love interest or your main character? I see it as about as unfair as trying to get someone who doesnât want to do so. 
Iâm not sure why itâs a big deal if 3 or 4 out of the 16+ planned ROs are people who donât want to have their own kids. I think it give way for an interesting opportunity for storytelling
Thatâs right, there will be an option for that tlwith the main 4 and a majority of the other ROs
Iâm glad! I wasnât sure how interested people would be in the theme and Iâm pleasantly surpised my how many people like the idea 
So I went through Katieâs chapter, found some typos and one or two mistakes.
I feel like youâre meant to say âbreathâ, not âbreatheâ
Also believe youâre meant to say âintsalledâ
I feel like that third choice shouldnât be there, as thatâs entirely a different task.
The highlighted parts is describing the same thing. I would recommend removing the scene shown in the second picture (comes after the one in the first picture).
It says ââŚMichael should be with his familyâ, but thatâs the name for my MC, not the baby (which, in this case, is Elliot).
Beyond that, this is a good story which I hope will continue
Iâm really glad to here youâre enjoying the story!
Thank you for taking the time to point out those errors! I really appreciate that. They should be corrected as of now
Iâve been visiting the forum for a long time, and I probably know most of the WIPs we have here. Many of them are actually interesting, you know, superhero, demon hunter, teen-ager @ the boarding school, magician⌠you know, all these classical RPG things and more. All those stuff ⌠tried, tested and trusted. But this little gem of yours, itâs⌠well, itâs totally different. There has never been âsomething just like thisâ. That sets it apart. The story you got to tell is a very real one, and it doesnât hurt that itâs something that has not been explored before. So I am intrigued⌠letâs hope for the best.
The only thing that concerns me is that it might be really troublesome for you to handle 16 NPCs, their interactions with the MC and making them into some fleshed out characters, rather than just making them honourable mention or placeholder types. But hopefully you can pull it off, so my concerns might be for naught.
So far, I really like what I see. Fingers crossed for the future updates.
Ahhh thank you! Itâs crazy to me how much support this story has gotten! Hopefully, when itâs done it wonât disappoint.
Thatâs definitely a fair concern, itâs one of mine as well. I definitely want to try and avoid placeholder romances. Itâs definitely a challenge but I think the relationship (be it romantic or platonic) building aspect lends itself really well to allowing me to explore the characters in depth without sidetracking from the main story too much. The story evolved so much from the initial concept I had for it to be quite honest, which is how I ended up with the idea of having four different story lines to explore. Since each route can be written as itâs own story it allows me to write a handles of love interest for reach of them. Characters who appear offhandedly in one route may have a larger roll in another, become more fleshed out, and be a RO. Or at least thatâs the idea. How well I can execute this has yet to be seen. 
Iâm really glad youâre enjoying the story so far!
Hello!
Sam Chapter Two is now up!
If you have any questions/comment/corrections Iâll be around for all of it until I fall asleep.
Oh, and Happy Easter to those who are celebrating this weekend!
Edit: Also, Happy Passover!
