Making our character have a more hand-on presence is good and all but there is one glaring problem with all this.
Why should MC care? So we wake up in a Goblin Camp, some old guy calls us a number, gives us a name andā¦???
So I am supposed to care for the goblins who have tied me up, do supposedly what those who kidnapped want me to do? And why? Why shouldnāt I walk away now? I know nothing, I care about nothing and I want to go home. So, since I also happen to have superpowers, I should be capable of dealing with dangers. So I naturally want to go away and find some civilization, even if I cannot go back home. Biggest failure of this new chapter 1 is that, MC has no connections to this world at all, and no reason to care about it.
The old one was better at this. You witnessed the creation of the world, how it developed and even knew that Goblins were supposed to be your race, because your friends had their own. When you woke up in the Underworld, you met one of them and thus had a reason to care. Power, authority had nothing to do with it; there were others who were trapped with you. Others whom you knew from the past and suddenly their disappearences made sense.
At the same time, the scale seems to have gotten much, much smaller. A god? More like a chief of a small village who happens to have superpowers. What if you unite goblins? A king? Not a god though. Would a god care about day to day dealings of his followers? If he is a minor god, yeah maybe. Do gods the scale of 12 Olympians care? No, they donāt. They prefer to delegate small things and deal with big problems themselves. While some may enjoy it, I donāt. When I have my problems, which is being kidnapped far away from my home and forced into a world where I have to live in much shittier conditions, I wouldnāt care much about the problems of others.
So, in short, I need a reason to care, which means before continuing, this first chapters needs to drastically expand. It goes too fast, bam bam bam without explaining anything, doing anything, just putting you in situations and forcing you to pretend that you care. I donāt. So I donāt like the new demo at all and prefer the old one.
Now, it may become the same in the future chapters. The story might connect in a way similar to the old demo. But from just looking beginnings of both demos, the previous one is quite frankly, superior.
Edit2: I may have come off too strong now, maybe even offensive. I am sorry if thatās the case. I tend to go on rants a bit, but I donāt mean anything with it. I donāt meant to attack or something, just trying to show the problems I see in this new demo compared to the old one. Sorry if I have angered or offended.
