First, let me say that I really liked the amount of customisation that actually mattered in the WIP. Both when it comes to the different fantasy races/species you can choose from and how they affect your MCs’ abilities and the story and how even things like the heigh and body build of the MCs have an effect on their stats The story also seems quite interesting so far and I also quite liked the world building.
However, I have some problems with the ROs. I don’t know if talking about your problems with the ROs in WIPs is against the rules, if so, I apologise beforehand. And I will try to give my thoughts in a way that doesn’t come across as too insistent, since I know that the ROs and how they are, may often be quite personal to writers and among the things most set in stone in WIPs.
So here’s my thoughts, treat them how you will: As someone who usually goes for male MCs and never for M/M (or F/F) romances, I am particularly fond of female ROs(whether gender selectable or gender-locked) who are warrior and/or high strength/combat kind of characters. I don’t need more than one female RO to be like that in order to be happy and do also see the importance of the ROs to be varied both when it comes to their abilities and general type. I also know that I’m far from the only guy who is into those kind of female ROs(and that there are also a number of girls and women who are into such female ROs) So it is really disappointing to me to see that you’ve found no space for female ROs who are like that, instead only having one high intelligence and one high social skills female RO. When both the male ROs, on the other hand, are high strength and combat warrior types, this becomes doubly frustrating.
I’m obviously not in the target audience for the male ROs, but to me they seem quite similar. Both seem to be big brawns over brains bruiser-types warriors. Though I’m not denying that there are plenty of women and gay and bi/pan men who are into those kind of ROs, from what I’ve heard there are also at least some women and also some gay/bi/pan men who aren’t, which means that they are likely to be as frustrated as me at the lack of the kind of male ROs that they’re into. Though, like I said, I’m not in the target audience when it comes to them as ROs, I know that the ROs tend to also be the main NPCs in COGs, HGs and WIPs, which means that the MC will interact with them regularly and I do like to have possible “bros” that aren’t all warrior types and really distinct from one another. Also, when it comes to the female ROs, though there seem to be clear differences in their abilities and background, they also seem to be quite similar in some ways, by both being quite cold or at least emotionally distant, head rather than the heart and brains and deliberation rather than brawn and impulsive action kind of characters.
So , though I know it’s your WIP and it’s up to you to decide how to make it, my fond hope for it is that you’ll eventually mix things up a bit with the ROs, like by also introducing a female RO who is also a big and impulsive bruiser-type and a male RO who is a more deliberate brains rather than brawn kind of character. Or, if that is out of the question, maybe mixing things up more for the existing ROs so there’s not so much a divide between cold and deliberate brains rather than brawn female ROs and impulsive brawn rather than brains fighter male ROs.
I did go into much more detail about what I didn’t like about this WIP than what I did like about it, but just to be clear, this doesn’t mean that this adds up to how much weight I give them compared to one another. But it did mean that what I didn’t like and why didn’t like seemed to require a longer explanation than what I did like