A Thousand Miles of Sky (WIP)(demo updated March 10th, 2019)

Minnow · 2017-11-01T13:57:17.737Z

SirEdmund:

…chunks of a material that no doubt spent happier times as a shipping container.

I love this little turn of phrase. It’s so evocative, and just beautiful.

You have a typo on “tetanus,” unless the MC’s companion is referring to a disease you’re creating for the game’s setting.

SirEdmund · 2017-11-02T02:34:01.358Z

Aw, thank you so much! I’m glad you liked that part, it was fun to write and then fun to make the everyone go inside, haha.

And no, “tentus” is not a new space disease, just spell check failing me in my hour of need.

SirEdmund · 2017-12-03T21:58:48.966Z

Well, as predicted I got like nothing done last month. a-million-chromatic-dreams put it best:

(http://a-million-chromatic-dreams.tumblr.com/post/163704617659/me-when-artistic-inspiration-strikes-me-a-week)

I wrote this snippet this morning as an apology:

If Penrose had been emblematic of a frontier outpost on the rise, Okanogan is the polar opposite. A remote fueling station orbiting a small moon of a gas giant, Okanogan, also known as “Rendezvous”, had little to recommend itself these days. The expansion of the neighboring Penrose had forced the common trade routes to bypass Rendezvous entirely, and the smaller station was now well into its spiral of decline.

On an ordinary day, it’s little more than a watering hole for the locals and the occasional long haul freighters passing through this edge of space. But, as evidenced by the frigates, shuttles, cruisers, and escape craft crammed into end over end and spilling out beyond the meager mooring station, today is clearly no ordinary day.

lovinglydull · 2017-12-03T22:17:19.851Z

It’s good to hear from this WIP! Even if there’s not much to report, I’m still looking forward to it.

SirEdmund · 2017-12-04T02:25:28.470Z

Well thank you! I will say, spending November working on a different project left me eager to return to this one.

lokidemon007 · 2017-12-04T03:46:04.948Z

Fascinating game so far!

SirEdmund · 2018-01-03T03:54:37.190Z

Minor update to the first chapter, a lot of little changes. Most notably, I added a part to let folks input their own prouns if they so desire, trying to keep it as concise and unobnoxious as possible. I also spent several hours and 100+ lines of code writing a (bad) joke that most people probably won’t see #writerproblems

Current word count: 40,000

Alexandra · 2018-01-03T04:26:21.000Z

SirEdmund:

I also spent several hours and 100+ lines of code writing a (bad) joke that most people probably won’t see #writerproblems

You too?

pizzawarrior · 2018-01-03T05:57:46.525Z

Oooh, space!
Really love the game so far, it has intriguing characters and the way you write actions is really cool! (it’s 7 am, my brain isn’t nearly as awake as it ought to, sorry if that sentence didn’t make sense!)
Anyway, great writing, great pacing, great premises! I’m hooked!

SirEdmund · 2018-01-03T07:21:52.548Z

Thank you so much, I’m glad you like it so far! Characters are always my favorite part of a story, so I’m really glad you like these ones. (7am? It’s only 10pm where I live in Alaska, what’s the future like???)

Eric_knight · 2018-01-03T08:42:27.388Z

@SirEdmund
Very Well written and it really gives a feeling of “Space Opera” in the story-telling, i read that some

had compared it to “Firefly”… but is it possible that we are acting as someone like Han Solo ? and there is a Galactic Empire within it ? Could it be something like Star Wars instead ? although i hope the Empire is not going to be as dominant as the Sith Empire, else it would takes the fun out of it…Lol

But thus far, the character interaction seem fun… i actually laugh when Agent Reid Shot me in close range, and then i was kind of amuse when i asked her "You shot me "…

Will my “ex-Partner” Alice be featured regularly in future ? Is it a possibility that we can be together again ? I kind of like that scene when i was just about to remove her wallpaper on the homescreen , then i reconsider and decided to keep it instead … sentimental scene is always touching

Bugreporter · 2018-01-03T11:32:55.458Z

@SirEdmund
Bug found in chapter 2, choosing: “Push Isaac out of the way.”

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IvoryOwl · 2018-01-03T12:36:18.893Z

Are you sure that’s a bug and not just the end of the current demo? Many of these errors usually indicate you’ve reached the end of the current release, since the game only goes up to chapter 2… one would assume so.

SirEdmund · 2018-01-03T19:54:50.188Z

@Eric_knight: I’m so glad you like it so far! I’m a big sci-fi nerd and I love space opera, so this is definitely influenced by a bunch of different worlds, Star Wars and Firefly both being high on that (very long) list. The character interactions are my favorite part to write, so I’m glad you’re enjoying them!

Regarding Alice: this is not the last the MC will be seeing of her. Perhaps with sufficient groveling the two of them will be able to patch things up

@Bugreporter: thanks for the catch! Looks like I misspelled one of my variables, that’s embarrassing. I’ll get that fixed tonight when I get home. Thanks again!

Eric_knight · 2018-01-04T01:46:02.380Z

@SirEdmund

Haha… yeah i love the setting and character creation/interaction thus far, i think my main character is more like “ONE” in “Dark Matter” than Han Solo , goofy with integrity and will to fight a lost cause … hopefully my character won’t end up like ONE in Dark Matter

and definitely looking forward of meeting Alice again

SirEdmund · 2018-01-04T06:40:07.032Z

Alright, variable typo fixed and I made sure everything actually passed RandomTest this time instead of just throwing files around willy-nilly on Dashingdon.You’d hardly know programming was my day job

@Eric_knight: Dark Matter is on my watch list, but I haven’t actually started it yet, maybe I should for inspiration

Eric_knight · 2018-01-04T08:20:37.636Z

@SirEdmund

one of the plot of Dark Matter is the crew found out that a Cyborg was hidden inside one of the cargo box… which later on became their companion

Perhaps if one of the future Romance Option/friend is a Cyborg will help generate more interest to your work? and whether anyone can trust a programmable cyborg will be good debates

Kungfuboom · 2018-01-04T10:48:54.266Z

I’m glad this wip is still going, had me intrigued from start to finish. And we always need more space pirates hehe

Hope_Kibo · 2018-01-04T20:34:57.176Z

Love your style of writing and how the characters have real depth. Definitely looking forward to more

SirEdmund · 2018-01-05T03:34:08.097Z

Thanks for the encouragement and for your patience, it’s been slow-going but I’m still plugging away. I used to be able to spend time on this at work, but it’s been too chaotic lately, haha. There aren’t enough hours in the day.

@Eric_knight: now I really want to check out Dark Matter, I love discussions about Artificial Intelligence. I’ll keep your advice about a cyborg companion in mind…