The year is 2020.
In a world where superpowers were never a fantasy, and have been a staple of humanity from its very beginnings, you are a college student in Giga College, from the similarly named Giga City. Your days consist of stuffy professors and their long, boring lectures.
Or they did, at least, until you awaken latent superpowers, and your entire life gets turned on its head.
Taken under the wing of the world-renowned League of Heroes, you’re now a rookie in training that will soon spend their days protecting the citizens of your city from attacks by criminals, villains, and even natural disasters.
Juggle the expectations of your new allies and the increasingly strained political climate of the country as President Stratton tries his best to wipe your team’s goodwill off the map, all while figuring how far your newly-found abilities can, and will have to, take you.
But something more lurks in the underbelly of Giga City. Your appearance has set many plans into motion, just as it has shattered many others. And it won’t be long until centuries of resentment and forgotten grudges rear their head on the citizens that the League has sworn to protect.
This is Giga City. This is your city.
Don’t let it go down in flames.
Hello, everyone! My name’s Juan, and I’ve been working on a story for one of my ideas in the past few months.
(Cover Art without text, Forlorn, Ignis and Seeker)
Done by Lunarinh
(Ignis and Seeker)
Done by MaryMewt.
"I am Seeker. My search started long before I picked up the sword, and it will go on long after I am expected to put it down. That is the oath I have made."
Done by Mmeizn.
Seeker, Ignis and Forlorn.
Done by Daniann__.
(Aki and Latooni).
Done by Mary Mewt.
RO Info (Contains spoilers up to Chapter 2.)
Aki: 21 year old heroine. Extremely shy, she tends to be looked after by Forlorn. Any attempts to get close will have to go through him.
Characteristics: Dark hair, with blue-colored tips. Blue eyes. About 5’6 or so. Likes really cute things. Are you a cute thing?
Nova: 22 year old genius. Cocky, though can back it up. Somewhat guarded about his own person, so getting anything more than a shallow connection might be hard.
Characteristics: Latino, amber eyes. 5’11 or so. Spends most of his time tinkering with machines. Built much of the equipment you use.
Latooni Kitamura: 21 year old rookie, same as you. Pretty upbeat, though the whole hero-ing business might be more than she can chew.
Characteristics: Asian-American, purple hair, green eyes. 5’10. Likes joking around a lot, and your closest friend when you join the League. “First Girl Wins”? Maybe!
Ignis (Laura Coltello): 25. Founding member of the League. Literal definition of a trust fund baby, to her great dismay. Recent developments have left her in a weird place emotionally, maybe you can help?
Characteristics: Blonde hair, green eyes. Extremely rich, even outside of the League. 5’10. Someone’s gotten to her before you came about, but nothing ventured, nothing gained, right?
Mars: 23. Personal bodyguard to President Stratton. Pretty nice, unlike his boss. It’s clear he’s making the best out of an awful position. But maybe he doesn’t have to. Try and convince him.
Characteristics: Olive skin, blond hair. 6’0. His eyes are a deep, fiery red. He seems to take his job quite seriously, even if he doesn’t quite look like it. Then again, dating the guy that your boss hates might not be the smartest move…
Currently, the demo consists of the prologue and the first 4 chapters, coming out to over 147k words. Updates will be coming regularly-ish, as I take time to write whenever I have a moment from school and work.
This is my first attempt at writing a CYOA story, so any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated.
Regarding feedback, I’m looking for two tiers of things:
Low-level feedback: Grammar and structure. Is a sentence weird? Found a typo, or misspelled word? A paragraph that doesn’t fit in the scene? Please, let me know! I’m not a native English speaker, so I’m bound to make mistakes, and my knowledge of Choicescript isn’t the best either, so I could have mixed up labels or the like.
High-level feedback: Narrative and balance issues. What do you think of the characters? Is there something you expected the story to address, but didn’t? When offered the chance to give your opinion, did none of the options represent what you thought? Were the romances moving too fast?
If there’s anything I haven’t mentioned here, please don’t be afraid to bring it up. I love talking, and questions from you all is how I continue to give shape to this silly world of mine.
Without further ado, here’s the demo link: https://dashingdon.com/play/juan/a-tale-of-heroes/mygame/
I hope you have fun!
Also, if you have any questions or comments, here’s my Tumblr page: http://juantheashura.tumblr.com
I also have a Ko-Fi, in case you can and want to support my writing: https://ko-fi.com/juancuevas0168
Discord Server: A Tale of Heroes