What a refreshing take on urban fantasy! I liked the demo a lot, the writing style is chaotic, lively and absolutely hilarious. I felt half-lost at the beginning but it fits perfectly with my MC’s confusion at having just woken up and suddenly there’s this spectacled dragon asking very personal questions
You have a large cast of characters but I didn’t feel overwhelmed because their introductions are paced and rememberable. I still can’t pick a favorite yet, but I really liked HyperLink! I’m not sure why, but she stuck with me.
I also love how we can flirt with pretty much every character we came across I usually play as shy when it comes to romance, but I couldn’t resist some of those dialogues. My suggestion - especially at the beginning - is that you include more shy flirt options? For the more flustered MCs out there.
One thing I always like is when there are pre-determined names to choose from. It’s not a big thing, of course, but the names the author chooses usually fit the narrative, and it gives me a sense of the vibe the world is set into (plus, most of the time I’m lazy and don’t feel like typing lol). I know New York is pretty self-explanatory, however.
Looking at the paths you have planned, I can see this is a very ambitious project! Best of luck, and I’m looking forward to future updates