Hello! I am very sorry if I do something wrong here or misunderstood some of the rules and guidelines but I shall try my best to correct whatever mistakes I make.
As for why this thread is here, I just finished my first chapter of a story that I’ve been working on and was hoping to get some feedback on it. Grammar, vocabulary, pacing, and literally anything that comes to mind. If I can improve in it, please tell me. I welcome any and all constructive criticism.
As for the game, it’s an 52,000 word (for now) fantasy adventure based game. If that was enough to catch your interest, please try out the game. If you’d like more of a description;
It’s a game about overcoming pain and finding the positive in a sea of negative. In an adventure where your interactions with others and your decision making will be the determining factor of how you get through hardships, not just increasing your stats (but those are important too).
It’s set in a world with magic and a system that is very much based off one of my all time favorite worlds/stories, so I hope that doesn’t put you off. In fact, I do hope it is to your liking as well, since I assume we all know how good it feels when you convince a friend of your to try that one game or read that one book or watch that one show or eat that on–you get the point. XD
I hope you enjoy it.
So something that’s come to my attention is that I kind screwed up in the gender pronouns department. I promise to try my best to work on that. I will fix it with the release of the next chapter.
Please be patient with me and thank you again for trying it out.
Edit: HELLO!!! Guess who’s back! And I got a small gift :> (If you can call it a gift XD)
CHAPTER TWO AVAILABLE!!!
Another Edit: The link that was posted above doesn’t work anymore since I’ve updated the entire game thing whatever you wanna call it. Here’s the new link! There’s also a short message from me at bottom please check it out if you can.
Yet Another Edit: It’s been two weeks since the last update. How long did it take to make? Two days. I know. I disappoint myself as well.
LMAO JK CHAPTER 5 AVAILABLE! (Have you enjoy the little treat I put in there.)
Still the same link btw
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