I really enjoy what you have so far it has a really great plot and I enjoy all the characters but I have to say my favorite character so far is Alexis
I love how the story switches between the interrogation scene and the flashbacks. Even though it’s not complete, I like the flashback about the abandoned hospital because Orlando seems like an awesome character (I really hope he’s turned into a RO. )
I find the idea of there being more than one type of vampire interesting and hope we can learn more about each type (weaknesses, origins/how and why they turned into that type of vampire, etc) as the story continues.
I also like that the MC is from England because I often give my character a British accent.
I found Sebastian and Alexis were a little flat. The conversations between the MC and Sebastian felt too short and not very detailed for two people who are supposed to be close to one another, i.e. Sebastian trained the MC and him saying they were his “most promising student”.
The crossbow is a cool weapon but it seems impractical when you are going against creatures that are faster and stronger than typical humans. Maybe if we had the choice to choose our weapon(s), that would help? We could choose between a type of gun or the crossbow or another weapon.
Anyway, I think I’ve rambled enough now. All in all, the story is amazing. I hope you decide to continue writing it.
I enjoy playing this its fun love to see more of this
I don’t know if I can go into that much detail as five things I loved and hated, but I was kinda disappointed that the hunter from the second kill dies no matter what. From what little is said about her she seemed interesting.
Hello
Link doesn’t work… can you fix it ?
5 things I liked:
1 The interrogation scene (what a way to start a game).
2 Flashbacks (great for changing pace and giving the player was to grow attached to the MC and making the MC theirs also stat boosts! XD)
3 The world building and the lore within it. (would like to see more of its lore)
4 I like the subtle urgency behind the the plot urging the MC forward, so they can achieve their goal.
5 Customized crossbow 'nuff said.
Things to reconsider/change:
1 More fleshed out characters, they kinda waffled more than a politician does…(The cops were fine it is the later characters that need more defining)
2 For a seasoned Hunter it kinda felt my MC was more on the lines of a rookie, not kick ass as Blade.
3 If we have a customized crossbow, it need to be used more than just a cursory scene, and it should have an impact…(double entrande pun shoot me)
4 Flashback with your sister to form an attachment for the MC, rather than a premade quest objective.
5 In stat building sessions like the jail cell, wish I know how many more “moves” I havee left so I can build my character closer to how I see them…
Things I would like to see:
1 My sis!(So much plot potential here and angst material, it writes itself XD which will segue into 2 XD)
2 Being turned (bonus points if it by your sis, or to destroy her, orbe family for eternity, and her creator…plot PLOT!)
3 An epilogue, I like the vague vinettes of what happened after the story concludes how the MC impacted their world.
4 If we are turned, let the story continue, there are always secondary plot points to move the story forward.
5 more chances at better defining our character
I really do hope you pick up the pen and return to this lovely project.
Really interesting. Can’t wait to read the rest.
Thanks you for fix this link !
Good day !
This link does not work, can you fix it please
Sorry the link was deleted as the project was cancelled.