# A Hero of the New World \[WIP, Updated 2020-08-25\] **URL:** \ **Category:** Works In Progress\ **Tags:** nonbinary-inclusive, gender-choice, science-fiction\ **Created:** [August 25, 2020, 9:48am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160 "2020-08-25T09:48:59Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 7\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![autumnchen](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/autumnchen/32/136343_2.png) [@autumnchen](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/autumnchen)\ **Post date:** [August 25, 2020, 9:48am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/1 "2020-08-25T09:48:59Z")
Hello! _A Hero of the New World_ is a cyberpunk-ish/post-apocalyptic-ish story about becoming a hero (for various definitions of “hero”). The story takes place in Niagara Arcology, one of the remnants of “baseline” humanity after a devastating war with “posthumans” about 70 years prior to the events of the game. A new normalcy has emerged in this world, one marked by massive inequality and concentration of power. You are a brought up in this world, and through no fault of your own, you gain something akin to “superpowers”. There will be romance, although it will not be a focus of the story (all the potential ROs are canonically bisexual). There will be politics, including moments where you have to choose sides (or just run away). > **Characters/potential romance options** > > - You! You are a recent resident of the undercity who gets caught up in civil unrest, and develop some sort of powers… > - Dr. Evelyn Huang, MD. PhD.: a scientist who takes care of you after you are incapacitated. She seems nice so far… > - Lorien Rajakumar: Another superpower user, the only one you know of, who works for the authorities and helps to train you. You’ll find out their backstory eventually… > - Rosa Saez: An organizer in the (literally) underground political opposition. A one-time engineering student who has taken her skills to the revolutionary movement. > > (these are characters who have yet to be seen) > > - Leon Zhou: Another radical organizer, and former soldier in the Niagara Guard. He and Rosa grew up together, and they can date eventually (also they’re both trans). > - Max Kazimierz: A revolutionary leader who has disagreements with Rosa and Leon. > - Councilor Carla Bernstein: The speaker of the city’s governing Assembly; a member of the reformist faction in the government. > - General Janus Reinhart: the commander of the Niagara Guard (basically the paramilitary police). > > (there are others as well, but I don’t know how important they’ll be yet…) > **Questions for readers:** > > - In general, how is the story so far? > - How is the worldbuilding/lore? Is there too much lore dumping, or not enough? > - How are the characters? Are they interesting so far? Do they have distinct enough voices? How is the narration style? > - Should there be romantic elements this far? Should there be options for expressing attraction to some of the characters this early on? > - How are the stats? The personality stats are kind of a placeholder; I’m not sure if/how they’ll be used. Are there any suggestions? The philosophy stats are going to be more important though. Current status: ~10k words, covers over 1/2 of chapter 1 (with most likely 5 total chapters). So far, the story is pretty heavily railroaded, but it will open up later on. Updates will probably be rather slow, as I have a full time job and also multiple other interactive fiction projects ([Pageant](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/pageant-interactive-fiction-dating-sim-wip/29588), plus like two other choicescript things). Demo (2020-08-25): [https://dashingdon.com/play/autumnc/a-hero-of-the-new-world/mygame/](https://dashingdon.com/play/autumnc/a-hero-of-the-new-world/mygame/) Thank you so much for trying out my story! ---
**Author:** ![William5738](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/william5738/32/256321_2.png) [@William5738](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/William5738)\ **Post date:** [August 25, 2020, 11:00am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/2 "2020-08-25T11:00:03Z")
I think there should be more exposition on the different factions, I know there is some in the stats menu but not everyone will look there and it may be confusing. I also feel like it moves too quickly, in the space of a few choices we go from looking out a window to shooting balls of energy and maybe flying Aside from that I enjoyed playing and am looking forward to your next updates! ---
**Author:** ![Trazen4](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/trazen4/32/105046_2.png) [@Trazen4](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Trazen4)\ **Post date:** [August 25, 2020, 9:50pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/4 "2020-08-25T21:50:30Z")
Very interesting thus far. Pacing is good as is in my opinion. That said, there’s a bug where the game just goes to a “play again” menu after the second choice in the “fall” test. ---
**Author:** ![Arcane\_warrior](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/arcane_warrior/32/132820_2.png) [@Arcane\_warrior](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/Arcane_warrior)\ **Post date:** [September 10, 2020, 12:47am UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/5 "2020-09-10T00:47:04Z")
Are able to go through the hole game by not joining any side is that a possible path. ---
**Author:** ![redfield](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/redfield/32/153244_2.png) [@redfield](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/redfield)\ **Post date:** [September 21, 2020, 12:08pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/6 "2020-09-21T12:08:52Z")
I like it so far, bookmarked! \<3 ---
**Author:** ![autumnchen](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/user_avatar/forum.choiceofgames.com/autumnchen/32/136343_2.png) [@autumnchen](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/autumnchen)\ **Post date:** [September 22, 2020, 11:37pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/7 "2020-09-22T23:37:20Z")
Hello! No updates yet, but I’ve been thinking about the game and how it might be made better. Right now, I feel like there’s not really any cohesion with the stats and how they affect the story. Thus, I would like to tie the choices and powers to both the philosophy and personality stats in a coherent way (so some power usage types will be associated with different philosophies and so on). In addition, the opening feels a bit weak, and I’ve been thinking about how to improve it. Would it be better to have a flash-forward to a potential future scene rather than a vague scene from the past? Also I’m wondering about how to introduce the setting and politics in a more organic way, but I don’t have good ideas yet… I haven’t been working on this game as much I have been on other things (mostly Pageant, besides my actual jobs), and I’m not a fast writer in general, so updates might be somewhere between slow and very slow. > [@Trazen4](#): > > That said, there’s a bug where the game just goes to a “play again” menu after the second choice in the “fall” test. Unfortunately that’s where the demo ends right now. > [@Arcane\_warrior](#): > > Are able to go through the hole game by not joining any side is that a possible path. Yes, there will be a “run away from everything” path eventually, but that has its own challenges. ---
**Author:** ![system](https://global.discourse-cdn.com/choiceofgames/original/3X/e/f/efe1497a762edecdb6d569a1c4abee87508bf002.png) [@system](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/u/system)\ **Post date:** [November 21, 2020, 11:37pm UTC](https://forum.choiceofgames.com/t/a-hero-of-the-new-world-wip-updated-2020-08-25/85160/8 "2020-11-21T23:37:30Z")
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